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Describe a letter or poem or other piece of art that is important to you. Whywas it so important to you? Please include specific examples and details inyour statement. v.1

Describe a letter or poem or other piece of art that is important to you. Whywas it so important to you? Please include specific examples and details inyour statement. v. 1
It is argued that smoking in public places is presently prohibited in certain countries. A number of individuals say that such a rule is reasonable. This essay completely agrees with that statement because this action reduces the number of new smokers and less chances of getting infected by smokers. Out of all the arguments the strongest one to support my side is that the new smokers are less likely to smoke. This is to say that they are mostly teenagers and young adults and usually copy other smokers to show the maturity level, but by Banning public smoking, there are fewer chances to get in contact with them and this will help to not get addicted to smoking. A typical example of this is that according to survey in India, 60% reduction in the number of smokers after a ban in public areas. The other reason to prove my point is that the numbers of passive smokers have been drastically reduced and this means that fewer people affected by smoking. If smokers do not smoke in public area, the people are not contaminated by the fumes of smoking, which has detrimental effects on our body and cause of dangerous diseases such as cancer, Asthma. A typical reference for this is that my uncle had passed away because of cancer, even he never smoked a cigarette in his life. To conclude the essay, it can be finally commented that smoking in public zone is illegal in numerous countries and I personally believe that this rule of government far more valuable for all the citizens of the Nations because it reduces, the number of newcomers in smoking habits and the risk of getting affected by active smokers.
It
is argued
that
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smoking
in
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public
places is
presently
prohibited in certain countries. A
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number
of individuals say that such a
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rule
is reasonable. This essay completely
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agrees
with that statement
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because
this action
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reduces
the
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number
of new smokers and
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less
chances of getting infected by smokers.

Out of all the arguments the strongest one to support my side is that the new smokers are less likely to smoke. This is to say that they are
mostly
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teenagers
and young adults and
usually
copy other smokers to
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show
the maturity level,
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but
by Banning
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public
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smoking
, there are fewer chances to
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get
in contact with them and this will
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help
to not
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get
addicted to
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smoking
. A typical example of this is that according to survey in India, 60% reduction in the
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number
of smokers after a ban in
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public
areas.

The other reason to prove my point is that the
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numbers
of passive smokers have been
drastically
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reduced
and this means that fewer
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people
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affected
by
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smoking
. If smokers do not smoke in
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public
area, the
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people
are not contaminated by the fumes of
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smoking
, which has detrimental effects on our body and cause of
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dangerous
diseases such as cancer, Asthma. A typical reference for this is that my uncle had passed away
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because
of cancer, even he never smoked a cigarette in his life.

To conclude
the essay, it can be
finally
commented that
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smoking
in
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public
zone is illegal in numerous countries and I
personally
believe that this
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rule
of
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government
far more valuable for all the citizens of the Nations
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because
it
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reduces
, the
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number
of newcomers in
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smoking
habits and the
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risk
of getting
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affected
by active smokers.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay Describe a letter or poem or other piece of art that is important to you. Whywas it so important to you? Please include specific examples and details inyour statement. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
285 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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