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Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.14

Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. v. 14
A child’s education has never been about learning information and basic skills only. It has always included teaching the next generation how to be good members of society. Therefore, this cannot be the responsibility of the parents alone. In order to be a good member of any society, the individual must respect and obey the rules of their community and share their values. Educating children to understand the need to obey rules and respect others always begins in the home and is widely thought to be the responsibility of parents. They will certainly be the first to help children learn what is important in life, how they are expected to behave and what role they will play in their world. However, learning to understand and share the value system of a whole society cannot be achieved just in the home. Once a child goes to school, they are entering a wider community where teachers and peers will have just as much influence as their parents do at home. At school, children will experience working and living with people from a whole variety of backgrounds from the wider society. This experience should teach them how to co-operate with each other and how to contribute to the life of their community. But to be a valuable member of any community is not like learning a simple skill. It is something that an individual goes on learning throughout life and it is the responsibility of every member of a society to take responsibility for helping the younger generation to become active and able members of that society.
A child’s education has never been about
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learning
information and basic
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skills
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only
. It has always included teaching the
next
generation how to be
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good
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members
of
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society
.
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, this cannot be the
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responsibility
of the parents alone.

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good
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member
of any
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society
, the individual
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must
respect and obey the
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rules
of their community and share their values. Educating children to understand the need to obey
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rules
and respect others always
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begins
in the home and is
widely
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thought
to be the
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responsibility
of parents. They will
certainly
be the
first
to
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help
children learn what is
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important
in life, how they are
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expected
to behave and what role they will play in their world.

However
,
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learning
to understand and share the value system of a whole
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society
cannot
be achieved
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just
in the home. Once a child goes to school, they are entering a wider community where teachers and peers will have
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just
as much influence as their parents do at home. At school, children will experience working and living with
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people
from a whole variety of backgrounds from the wider
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society
. This experience should teach them how to co-operate with each other and how to contribute to the life of their community.

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But
to be a valuable
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member
of any community is not like
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learning
a simple
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skill
. It is something that an individual goes on
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learning
throughout life and it is the
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responsibility
of every
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member
of a
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society
to take
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responsibility
for helping the younger generation to become active and able
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members
of that
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society
.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. v. 14

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
264 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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