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Describe a close friend. You should say: how long you have known this person. how you metwhat kind of person he/she isand explain why you like him/her. v.1

Describe a close friend. You should say: how long you have known this person. how you metwhat kind of person he/she isand explain why you like him/her. v. 1
The economic progress of a country is being noted as a crucial goal of many governments. It is believed that the government focus more on developing the country’s economic status, while others claim that different types of progress must be given a fair approach. This essay will discuss both views in detail and argue why the first view is far more superior than the latter. On the one hand, there are several reasons why economic advancement is vital in a country. Firstly, having a progressive economy attracts more tourists, which increases the tourism rate of a nation. According to a research, which was conducted in Japan, an increase tourism rate is directly proportional to economic rise. This is why the government invests a huge amount of money in tourism. Secondly, building streets and railways are possible due to this progress. For instance, in the Philippines, where economic development is not evident, fabricating railways are constrained, which is due to a limited budget. Lastly is the expanding work establishments and job opportunities. For example, in America, they have a lot of vacant positions open for job seekers due to there developed economy. On the other hand, other types must also be given an equal attention. This includes health care, wherein the political leaders should take action about the expensive medical expenses and medicines. In addition, medical mission programs, such as free checkups, must be implemented in order to serve and reach the people who live in the remote areas. Furthermore, health benefits for employees and elderly must also be improved. Another is education, which must be given necessary action in order to decrease unemployment, which is a major problem in some countries. Moreover, giving free education and scholarships to people will enhance a person’s way of living. In conclusion, it is indubitable that economic breakthrough must be prioritized, in order for the government to earn a budget, which will subsidize the other factors.
The
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economic
progress of a
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country
is
being noted
as a crucial goal of
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many
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governments
. It
is believed
that the
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government
focus more on developing the
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country’s
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economic
status, while others claim that
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different
types of progress
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must
be
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given
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fair
approach. This essay will discuss both views in detail and argue why the
first
view is far
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more superior than
the latter.

On the one hand, there are several reasons why
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economic
advancement is vital in a
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country
.
Firstly
, having a progressive economy attracts more tourists, which increases the tourism rate of a nation. According to a research, which
was conducted
in Japan, an increase tourism rate is
directly
proportional to
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economic
rise. This is why the
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government
invests a huge amount of money in tourism.
Secondly
, building streets and railways are possible due to this progress.
For instance
, in the Philippines, where
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economic
development is not evident, fabricating railways
are constrained
, which is due to a limited budget.
Lastly
is the expanding work establishments and job opportunities.
For example
, in America, they have
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a lot of
vacant positions open for job seekers due to there developed economy.

On the
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other
hand,
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other
types
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must
also
be
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given
an equal attention. This includes health care, wherein the political leaders should take action about the expensive medical expenses and medicines.
In addition
, medical mission programs, such as free checkups,
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must
be implemented
in order to serve and reach the
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people
who
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live
in the remote areas.
Furthermore
, health benefits for employees and elderly
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must
also
be
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improved
. Another is education, which
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must
be
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given
necessary action in order to decrease unemployment, which is a major problem in
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some
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countries
.
Moreover
, giving free education and scholarships to
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people
will enhance a person’s way of living.

In conclusion
, it is indubitable that
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economic
breakthrough
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must
be prioritized
, in order for the
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government
to earn a budget, which will subsidize the
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other
factors.
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IELTS essay Describe a close friend. You should say: how long you have known this person. how you metwhat kind of person he/she isand explain why you like him/her. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
322 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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