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Depression is a psychological disorder in which a person is overwhelmed by an emotional crisis Symptons of depression include feelings of hopelessness sadness and despair loss of interest and pleasure in things weight loss or weight gain difficulty fallin v. 1
Some people are of the opinion that government should invest more in various forms of health matters and also educating her people instead of wastefully spending on art related materials while others have a contrary opinion. In this essay I will examine both sides of the arguments and then state my opinion. One of the sides of the argument states that the benefits of educating and providing proper medical facilities for the people outweigh the investing in art works in governance. The main reason for this taking this side is the impact of education and good healthy people in a community. With improper health care centres, the mortality rate would increase such as that at every sickness and diseases, due to lack of proper and well-equipped health centre, people are bound to die exponentially. In addition, lack of proper funding on education, the economic growth would be ravaged severely due to lack of technocrat that would take the country progressively. One good illustration of this is Nigeria, where the government would rather spend on frivolous expenses that protecting the future of the people by investing both in the health and education aspect of the economy. This has resulted into some level of redundancy within the system instead of growth. In other words, it is also possible to make opposing opinion of these. People argue that the significance of craft cannot be overemphasized. The work of art beautifies everywhere it is placed and every government needs some of these to portray the kind of value they place on their government. For example, the queen of England has wonderful art decorated across every wall in her palace which beautifies the entire interiors. A second opinion is that some of these great art work could become more valuable in the long run making it even more expensive their current worth. A particular good example is the pyramid in Egypt and the number of visitors every year and the amount the authority has made from it. In conclusion, I believe both arguments have their merits, but I believe spending resources on well-being and literacy is what builds a nation’s development and wealthy, which I support because the true wealth of a nation is its how much value it put on lives and education.
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Some
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people
are of the
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opinion
that
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government
should invest more in various forms of
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health
matters and
also
educating her
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people
instead
of
wastefully
spending on
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art
related materials while others have a contrary
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opinion
. In this essay I will examine both sides of the arguments and then state my opinion.

One of the sides of the argument states that the benefits of educating and providing proper medical facilities for the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
outweigh the investing in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
art
works in governance. The main reason for this taking this side is the impact of
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education
and
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good
healthy
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people
in a community. With improper
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health
care
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centres
, the mortality rate would increase such as that at every sickness and diseases, due to lack of proper and well-equipped
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health
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centre
,
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people
are bound
to
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die
exponentially
.
In addition
, lack of proper funding on
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education
, the economic growth would
be ravaged
severely
due to lack of technocrat that would take the country
progressively
. One
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good
illustration of this is Nigeria, where the
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government
would
rather
spend on frivolous expenses that protecting the future of the
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people
by investing both in the
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health
and
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education
aspect of the economy. This has resulted into
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some
level of redundancy within the system
instead
of growth.

In other words
, it is
also
possible to
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make
opposing
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opinion
of these.
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People
argue that the significance of craft cannot
be overemphasized
. The work of
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art
beautifies everywhere it
is placed
and every
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government
needs
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some
of these to portray the kind of value they place on their
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government
.
For example
, the queen of England has wonderful
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art
decorated across every wall in her palace which beautifies the entire interiors. A second
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opinion
is that
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some
of these great
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art
work could become more valuable in the long run making it even more expensive their
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current
worth. A particular
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good
example is the pyramid in Egypt and the number of visitors every year and the amount the authority has made from it.

In conclusion
, I believe both arguments have their merits,
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but
I believe spending resources on well-being and literacy is what builds a nation’s development and wealthy, which I support
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because
the true wealth of a nation is its how much value it put on
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lives
and
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education
.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Depression is a psychological disorder in which a person is overwhelmed by an emotional crisis Symptons of depression include feelings of hopelessness sadness and despair loss of interest and pleasure in things weight loss or weight gain difficulty fallin v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
379 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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