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Demand for food is increasing worldwide. What is the cause of this? What measures can the international community take to meet this demand? v.8

Demand for food is increasing worldwide. What is the cause of this? What measures can the international community take to meet this demand? v. 8
In the modern world, one of the major concerns for the humankind is the growing demand for food. In this regard, scientists believe that the main cause of this problem is increasing number of the world population. However, it can be resolved through appropriate measures. It is widely known that the main cause of this problem is overpopulation. Actually, the worlds’ population experienced a drastic increase in the last two decades. As a result, these can create a shortage of nutrition. To illustrate, world population is expected to increase from 7. 9 billion in 2017 to 9. 7 billion by 2050. Furthermore, climate change also can influence of the production of food. Nowadays, climatic changes happening due to various reasons like depletion of ozone layer, acid rain and global warming have led to a decrease in the production of food. For example, farmers can lose about 50% of their harvests, because of water shortage. However, this issue can be improved by using advanced technologies and international aid. Firstly, farmers should use new technologies in order to increase their production. In this regard, they should create new ways of raising crops. A good illustration of this is a new environmental sustainable type of crop, which can survive in extreme conditions. Moreover, international organizations, such as the UN, should encourage wealthy countries to export their nutrient products in cheap prices to the poor countries, because it can alleviate the situation. For example, the UN can create a new branch, which can regulate this problem. To conclude, although population is increasing and climatic changes have damaged the current supply of food, food market can be stimulated. In this regard, international aid and new technologies can partly solve this issue.
In the modern
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world
, one of the major concerns for the humankind is the growing demand for
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food
. In this regard, scientists believe that the main cause of this problem is increasing number of the
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world
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population
.
However
, it can
be resolved
through appropriate measures.

It is
widely
known that the main cause of this problem is overpopulation. Actually, the
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worlds’
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population
experienced a drastic increase in the last two decades.
As a result
, these can create a shortage of nutrition. To illustrate,
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world
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population
is
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expected
to increase from 7. 9 billion in 2017 to 9. 7 billion by 2050.
Furthermore
, climate
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change
also
can influence of the production of
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food
. Nowadays, climatic
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changes
happening due to various reasons like depletion of ozone layer, acid rain and global warming have led to a decrease in the production of
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food
.
For example
, farmers can lose about 50% of their harvests,
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because
of water shortage.

However
, this issue can be
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improved
by using advanced technologies and international aid.
Firstly
, farmers should
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use
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new
technologies in order to increase their production. In this regard, they should create
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new
ways of raising crops. A
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good
illustration of this is a
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new
environmental sustainable type of crop, which can survive in extreme conditions.
Moreover
, international organizations, such as the UN, should encourage wealthy countries to export their nutrient products in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cheap
prices to the poor countries,
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because
it can alleviate the situation.
For example
, the UN can create a
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new
branch, which can regulate this problem.

To conclude
, although
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population
is increasing and climatic
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changes
have damaged the
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current
supply of
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food
,
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food
market can
be stimulated
. In this regard, international aid and
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new
technologies can partly solve this issue.
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IELTS essay Demand for food is increasing worldwide. What is the cause of this? What measures can the international community take to meet this demand? v. 8

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
286 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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