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Some people think that wild animals should not be kept in zoos. Others believe that they are good reasons for having zoos. Discuss both views and give your own opinion v.3

Some people think that wild animals should not be kept in zoos. Others believe that they are good reasons for having zoos. 3
It is taught by some people that undomesticated animals should not be caged and allowed to roam freely in their natural habitats, while some others say the wildlife should be kept at the zoos. The first set of people feels animals are made to suffer unnecessarily if they are kept in captivity. Their reason being that, these animals are trapped and kept in small cages. They are not allowed to freely move around which should be their natural environment. For instance, a Lion is not suppose to be caged, they should be in the jungle where they are able to move freely, eat the enjoy their terrain. Some other people believe animals should be caged and monitored. They argue that this saves endangered species since they are closely monitored and protected from poachers. This set of people also believe that caged animals can be used for entertainment purposes. For example, people are able to see animals like Lion, Hyena and so on which they would not be able to see normally. In my own opinion, animals should not be caged. Firstly, they also should have the right to move around in their natural dwelling and enjoy their lives. They should not be used as elements of entertainment or research in any way. These wildlife suffers so much boredom and stress because they confined to a particular space. Secondly, these animals may escape their cages and be a serious danger to themselves and other people. Take, for instance, a hyena breaking out of its cage and running into a place filled with people. Irrespective of how secure these facilities can be, this unfortunate incidences can still occur which would be terribly disastrous as there would be loss of lives and properties. In conclusion, wildlife should be allowed to thrive in their natural territory. They should not be caged or hindered for any purpose. Despite what other people say, animal rights activists should ensure that proper processes are put in place to make this happen.
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others say the wildlife should be
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animals
are made
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unnecessarily
if they are
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kept
in captivity. Their reason being that, these
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animals
are trapped
and
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kept
in
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small
cages. They are not
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allowed
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around which should be their
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natural
environment.
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, a Lion is not
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, they should be in the jungle where they are able to
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move
freely
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caged
and monitored. They argue that this saves endangered species since they are
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monitored and protected from poachers. This set of
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also
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caged
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animals
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used
for entertainment purposes.
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see
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animals
like Lion, Hyena and
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on which they would not be able to
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dwelling and enjoy their
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lives
. They should not be
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used
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may escape their cages and be a serious
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danger
to themselves and
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other
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people
. Take,
for instance
, a hyena breaking out of its cage and running into a place filled with
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people
. Irrespective of how secure these facilities can be, this unfortunate incidences can
still
occur which would be
terribly
disastrous as there would be loss of
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lives
and properties.

In conclusion
, wildlife should be
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allowed
to thrive in their
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natural
territory. They should not be
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caged
or hindered for any purpose. Despite what
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other
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people
say,
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animal
rights activists should ensure that proper processes
are put
in place to
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make
this happen.
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IELTS essay Some people think that wild animals should not be kept in zoos. Others believe that they are good reasons for having zoos. 3

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