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Deforestation is a serious matter, as the forest throughout the world are coming to an end. What are the causes, solutions and effect of this problem. v.1

Deforestation is a serious matter, as the forest throughout the world are coming to an end. What are the causes, solutions and effect of this problem. v. 1
People are becoming very selfish nowadays. They cut the trees in the forest and make use of them. Therefore, as a result, there is a rapid increase in the global warming. In this essay we will come to know the root cause, what effect does? And try to come up with some solutions. To begin, These days the value of timber is going very high wherein everybody like to decorate their houses with the costliest wood possible to show off their luxury. For example, a person named XYZ in USA brought a dining table worth 10000 USD which is not necessary. Secondly, there is a lot of illegal smuggling happening all over the world due to its high value. No one is bothered about the after effect it causes. As a consequence, there is an increase in the greenhouse gases, melting of the ice glaciers, disturbance caused to the food chain in the ecosystem. Next, the government should come up with strict rules so that it will be a punishable offence if somebody is caught cutting the them illegally. The school and colleges should encourage the young ones to plant them in their neighbourhood. For instance, according to ABC stats there are only 100 plants being planted for every 1000 trees chopped off. The future generation should take care of it and try to maintain ecological balance. Otherwise, they will be in for some hard time ahead. Finally, It is the prime duty of each and every individual who breathes in the planet, to take care of the mother nature. More awareness could be created among the people to show the after effects of deforestation before it is too late.
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People
are becoming
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very
selfish nowadays. They
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cut
the trees in the forest and
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make
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use
of them.
Therefore
,
as a result
, there is a rapid increase in the global warming. In this essay we will
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come
to know the root cause, what effect does? And try to
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come
up with
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some
solutions.

To
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begin
, These days the value of timber is going
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
high wherein everybody like to decorate their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
houses
with the costliest wood possible to
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show
off their luxury.
For example
, a person named XYZ
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in USA
brought a dining table worth 10000 USD which is not necessary.
Secondly
, there is
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a lot of
illegal smuggling happening all over the world due to its high value. No one
is bothered
about the after effect it causes. As a consequence, there is an increase in the greenhouse gases, melting of the ice glaciers, disturbance caused to the food chain in the ecosystem.

Next
, the
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government
should
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come
up with strict
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rules
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so
that it will be a punishable
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offence
if somebody
is caught
cutting
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the them
illegally
. The school and colleges should encourage the young ones to plant them in their
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neighbourhood
.
For instance
, according to ABC stats there are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
100 plants
being planted
for every 1000 trees chopped off. The future generation should take care of it and try to maintain ecological balance.
Otherwise
, they will be in for
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
time ahead.

Finally
, It is the prime duty of each and every individual who breathes in the planet, to take care of the mother nature. More awareness could
be created
among the
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people
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
the after effects of deforestation
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before
it is too late.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Deforestation is a serious matter, as the forest throughout the world are coming to an end. What are the causes, solutions and effect of this problem. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
280 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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