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Cutting down forests is a real environmental threat; yet, this is still happening at a great rate around the world. Why do you think forests are being destroyed? Are there any benefits from the destruction of forests? v.1

Cutting down forests is a real environmental threat; yet, this is still happening at a great rate around the world. Why do you think forests are being destroyed? Are there any benefits from the destruction of forests? v. 1
Deforestation is harming the planet, but despite this fact, there does not seem to be any reduction in the rate at which trees are being destroyed. There are many reasons for cutting down trees, ranging from the commercial greed of large companies to the needs of subsistence farmers. This practice does have a few immediate benefits, but they are outweighed by its negative impact. Rainforests are being destroyed for a variety of reasons. Firstly, much of the forest in Central and South America has been cleared to raise cattle for the North American beef market. In addition, logging for valuable timbers such as mahogany and teak, which are used to make expensive furniture, has been going on for centuries, as has clear felling for the production of charcoal. Forests are also cut down to make way for plantations to grow food crops such as bananas and sugar cane. In some countries, forests are removed in order to extract precious metals and minerals or to search for new oil deposits. In developing countries, some people need to cut down trees to provide fuel for their daily life, and this is also a significant source of deforestation. There are certain benefits to be gained from the harvesting of forests. Primarily, this makes jobs available for local people. It also yields timber for building dwellings and it makes space for growing crops. In countries with struggling economies, timber can be exported for foreign revenue, which can then be used to provide services and infrastructure to improve the lives of citizens. To sum up, forests are being cut down mostly to make profits for multi-national companies and to provide resources to the developed world. However, for some people, felling the forest is an age-old way of life for survival. While this practice may provide short-term gains, in the long term it is unsustainable.
Deforestation is harming the planet,
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but
despite this fact, there does not seem to be any reduction in the rate at which trees are being
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destroyed
. There are
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many
reasons for cutting
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down
trees, ranging from the commercial greed of large
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companies
to the needs of subsistence farmers. This practice does have a few immediate benefits,
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but
they
are outweighed
by its
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negative
impact.

Rainforests are being
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destroyed
for a variety of reasons.
Firstly
, much of the
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forest
in Central and South America has
been cleared
to raise cattle for the North American beef market.
In addition
, logging for valuable timbers such as mahogany and teak, which are
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used
to
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make
expensive furniture, has been going on for centuries, as has
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clear
felling for the production of charcoal.
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Forests
are
also
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cut
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down
to
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make
way for plantations to grow food crops such as bananas and sugar cane. In
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some
countries,
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forests
are removed
in order to extract precious metals and minerals or to search for new oil deposits. In
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developing countries
,
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some
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people
need to
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cut
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down
trees to
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provide
fuel for their daily life, and this is
also
a significant source of deforestation.

There are certain benefits to
be gained
from the harvesting of
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forests
.
Primarily
, this
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makes
jobs available for local
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people
. It
also
yields timber for building dwellings and it
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makes
space for growing crops. In countries with struggling economies, timber can
be exported
for foreign revenue, which can then be
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used
to
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provide
services and infrastructure to
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improve
the
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lives
of citizens.

To sum up,
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forests
are being
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cut
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down
mostly
to
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make
profits for multi-national
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companies
and to
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provide
resources to the developed world.
However
, for
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some
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people
, felling the
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forest
is an age-
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old
way of life for survival. While this practice may
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provide
short-term gains, in the long term it is unsustainable.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Cutting down forests is a real environmental threat; yet, this is still happening at a great rate around the world. Why do you think forests are being destroyed? Are there any benefits from the destruction of forests? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
309 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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