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Currently there is a trend towards the use of alternative forms of medicine. However, at best these methods are ineffective, and at worst they may be dangerous. To what extent do you agree with this statement? v.7

Currently there is a trend towards the use of alternative forms of medicine. However, at best these methods are ineffective, and at worst they may be dangerous. v. 7
Medication is an essential ingredient to support healthiness at the worse conditions. This ingredient may change across the time because medical education is a dynamic knowledge. Nowadays, scientists have found many types of medicine, including the alternative forms. This form has been believed to be more efficient than the other types of medicines. However, the alternative forms of medicine do not always work as we expected, sometimes they are ineffective and may cause serious problems. Alternative forms of medicine have a dramatic increase in its consumption for the past years. This method has been proven that can heal the symptom faster than the traditional method. For instance, the vaccine of Spanish influenza effectively kills the virus by strengthening the immune system, and prevent the Spanish influenza. Therefore, this preventive action can save more time, energy, and money because people do not have to be hospitalized and worry about being infected by the virus. Furthermore, people can still do their activities without any interruption by their health condition. On the other hand, alternative forms of medicine may bring a drawback. Since they are made for a specific illness, it cannot be used for other similar sickness. Therefore, the utilization of this method needs awareness. For instance, the Spanish influenza vaccine is highly recommended only for this flu. However, many doctors still use this vaccine to combat the ordinary flu, which is not effective because ordinary nausea has different protein molecule than the Spanish flu, therefore, this vaccine cannot kill the ordinary nausea. Moreover, when the patients have an autoimmune disease, this unnecessary vaccine will wake up the immune and may cause other problems to the patient’s health. Thus, it may be dangerous to some people. To summarize, alternative medication is work for the specific cases and cannot be used for others. Therefore, its usage must be used under control.
Medication is an essential ingredient to support healthiness at the worse conditions. This ingredient may
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change
across the time
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because
medical education is
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a dynamic knowledge
. Nowadays, scientists have found
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many
types of
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medicine
, including the
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alternative
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forms
. This
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form
has
been believed
to be more efficient than the
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other
types of medicines.
However
, the
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alternative
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forms
of
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medicine
do not always work as we
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expected
,
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sometimes
they are ineffective and may cause serious problems.

Alternative
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forms
of
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medicine
have a dramatic increase in its consumption for the past years. This method has
been proven
that can heal the symptom faster than the traditional method.
For instance
, the
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vaccine
of Spanish influenza
effectively
kills the virus by strengthening the immune system, and
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prevent
the Spanish influenza.
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Therefore
, this preventive action can save more time, energy, and money
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because
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people
do not
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have to
be hospitalized
and worry about
being infected
by the virus.
Furthermore
,
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people
can
still
do their activities without any interruption by their health condition.

On the
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other
hand,
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alternative
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forms
of
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medicine
may bring a drawback. Since they
are made
for a specific illness, it cannot be
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used
for
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other
similar sickness.
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Therefore
, the utilization of this method needs awareness.
For instance
, the Spanish influenza
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vaccine
is
highly
recommended
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only
for this flu.
However
,
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many
doctors
still
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use
this
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vaccine
to combat the ordinary flu, which is not effective
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because
ordinary nausea has
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different
protein molecule than the Spanish flu,
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therefore
, this
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vaccine
cannot kill the ordinary nausea.
Moreover
, when the patients have an autoimmune disease, this unnecessary
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vaccine
will wake up the immune and may cause
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other
problems to the patient’s health.
Thus
, it may be
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dangerous
to
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some
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people
.

To summarize
,
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alternative
medication is work for the specific cases and cannot be
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used
for others.
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Therefore
, its usage
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must
be
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used
under control.
19Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
26Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Currently there is a trend towards the use of alternative forms of medicine. However, at best these methods are ineffective, and at worst they may be dangerous. v. 7

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
308 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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