Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Currently there is a trend towards the use of alternative forms of medicine. However, at best these methods are ineffective and at worst they may be dangerous. To what extent do you agree with this statement? v.1

Currently there is a trend towards the use of alternative forms of medicine. However, at best these methods are ineffective and at worst they may be dangerous. v. 1
Alternative medicine is not new. It is accepted that it has predated conventional medicine and is still used only many people all around the world. In my opinion, I am unconvinced that traditional medicine is dangerous and feel that both conventional and traditional medicine can be useful. Reasons why the conventional medical community is often dismissive for alternatives are several. Firstly, there has been very little scientific research in the fields of alternative methods of treatment resulting in scarcity of evidence to support the claims of their supporters. Secondly, this form of medicine is recommended by family or friends which in turn adds positive attitude and can be one of the reasons for the cure with alternative therapy. Also, it is used for long-term chronic illnesses and therefore acute medical conditions need conventional medical treatment. In contrast, alternative therapies have recorded very few or little side-effects, far away from being dangerous. As a result it can not be life-threatening. In other words, there has been a lot of anecdotal evidence from people who underwent these procedures that these therapies work. For example, there are a lot of people in the western countries who are ready to pay for alternative forms of medicines, eventhough the government provides free conventional medicines. So it is always thoughtful that people would pay only if these therapies will be helpful. I strongly believe that conventional medicine and alternative therapies can and should co-exist. They have different strengths and can bot be useful to target particular medical problems. The best situation would be for alternative therapies to be used to support and complement conventional medicine.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Alternative
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
medicine
is not new. It is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
accepted
that it has predated
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
conventional
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
medicine
and is
still
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
all around the world. In my opinion, I
am unconvinced
that traditional
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
medicine
is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
dangerous
and feel that both
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
conventional
and traditional
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
medicine
can be useful.

Reasons why the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
conventional
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
medical
community is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
often
dismissive for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
alternatives
are several.
Firstly
, there has been
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
little
scientific research in the fields of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
alternative
methods of treatment resulting in scarcity of evidence to support the claims of their supporters.
Secondly
, this form of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
medicine
is recommended
by family or friends which in turn
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
adds
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
attitude and can be one of the reasons for the cure with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
alternative
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
therapy
.
Also
, it is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
for long-term chronic illnesses and
therefore
acute
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
medical
conditions need
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
conventional
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
medical
treatment.

In contrast
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
alternative
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
therapies
have recorded
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
few or
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
little
Did you mean "side effects" (=adverse effect, unintended consequence)? Open compounds are not hyphenated.
side-effects
, far away from being
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
dangerous
.
“As” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
As
a result it can not be life-threatening.
In other words
, there has been
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
anecdotal evidence from
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
who underwent these procedures that these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
therapies
work.
For example
, there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
in the western countries who are ready to pay for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
alternative
forms of medicines,
Possible spelling mistake found.
eventhough
the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
provides free
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
conventional
medicines.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
it is always thoughtful that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
would pay
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
if these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
therapies
will be helpful.

I
strongly
believe that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
conventional
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
medicine
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
alternative
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
therapies
can and should co-exist. They have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
strengths and can bot be useful to target particular
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
medical
problems. The best situation would be for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
alternative
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
therapies
to be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
to support and complement
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
conventional
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
medicine
.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
36Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
If you talk to a man in a language he understands, that goes to his head. If you talk to him in his own language, that goes to his heart.
Nelson Mandela

IELTS essay Currently there is a trend towards the use of alternative forms of medicine. However, at best these methods are ineffective and at worst they may be dangerous. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
269 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts


Recent posts