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Currently there is a trend towards the use of alternative form of medicine. However at best, these methods are ineffective, and at worst may be dangerous. To what extent do you agree with this statement. v.1

Currently there is a trend towards the use of alternative form of medicine. However at best, these methods are ineffective, and at worst may be dangerous. v. 1
The patronage of alternative forms of medicine by people in recent times is becoming increasingly popular and this is believed by some that at best, these methods can be harmful and ineffective. In my opinion, I partially agree with this view as these alternatives could be beneficial as well as dangerous depending on the context and level of scientific study done on them. On the one hand, a majority of medical alternatives have not been fully studied by science and could have some dangerous side effects. While these medications could be very helpful with people's symptoms, they could also cause some problems in the body system. For example, a popular local herb in China used for relief of stomach aches was studied by experts and discovered to cause bladder cancer in about 40percent of its users as at 2016, causing the government to abolish its use. Another issue with the use of these alternatives is that some have been found to offer immediate relief meanwhile the main problem is left untreated. For instance, in Uganda where snake bites are frequent, natives usually treat the affected bitten limb by occluding it with tight ropes and applying some oils and herbs. While this method relieves the pain significantly, it has been medically proven to be ineffective and eventually cause gangrene of that limb. However, some alternative forms of medicine have been proven to be useful with little or no harmful problems associated with them. A good example is therapies like acupuncture and massage which have been proven to be safe and beneficial. In other words, they are good stress relievers and effective pain killers when we'll administered. In conclusion, although the trend towards the utilisation of medical alternatives is thought by some to be problematic, I believe that it depends on the forms used and the studies that they have undergone. Thus, they should be researched more by science and not be ruled out as harmful methods.
The patronage of
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alternative
forms of medicine by
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people
in recent times is becoming
increasingly
popular and this
is believed
by
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some
that at best, these methods can be harmful and ineffective. In my opinion, I
partially
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agree
with this view as these
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alternatives
could be beneficial
as well
as
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dangerous
depending on the context and level of scientific study done on them.

On the one hand, a majority of medical
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alternatives
have not been
fully
studied by science and could have
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some
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
dangerous
side effects. While these medications could be
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very
helpful with
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people
's symptoms, they could
also
cause
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some
problems in the body system.
For example
, a popular local herb in China
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used
for relief of stomach aches
was studied
by experts and discovered to cause bladder cancer in about 40percent of its users as at 2016, causing the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
to abolish its
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
.

Another issue with the
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use
of these
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alternatives
is that
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
have
been found
to offer immediate relief meanwhile the main problem is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
left
untreated.
For instance
, in Uganda where snake bites are frequent, natives
usually
treat the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
affected
bitten limb by occluding it with tight ropes and applying
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
oils and herbs. While this method relieves the pain
significantly
, it has been
medically
proven to be ineffective and
eventually
cause gangrene of that limb.

However
,
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some
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alternative
forms of medicine have
been proven
to be useful with
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little
or no harmful problems associated with them. A
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good
example is therapies like acupuncture and massage which have
been proven
to be safe and beneficial.
In other words
, they are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
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stress
relievers and effective pain killers when we'll
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administered
.

In conclusion
, although the trend towards the
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utilisation
of medical
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alternatives
is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
thought
by
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
to be problematic, I believe that it depends on the forms
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
and the studies that they have undergone.
Thus
, they should
be researched
more by science and not
be ruled
out as harmful methods.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
6Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay Currently there is a trend towards the use of alternative form of medicine. However at best, these methods are ineffective, and at worst may be dangerous. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
325 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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