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Crime rate, in most countries, is often higher in urban areas than in rural areas. Why do you think that is? What can be done to reduce the crime rate? v.5

Crime rate, in most countries, is often higher in urban areas than in rural areas. Why do you think that is? What can be done to reduce the crime rate? v. 5
Crime has always been a heated and problematic issue to every country in the world, capturing an inordinate amount of attention of the public. In recent years, some studies conducted the escalating crime rate in matropolitan is asserted to have higher tendency than in the countryside. In this essay, it is worthwhile to examine some of the main causes and suggest some plausible solutions. We may point out an indisputable fact that the first cause of high crime rate in urban area is the high divergence in ethnical terms which sometimes accidentally lead to the lack of mutual understanding and empathy towards others compared to rural areas where prodominantly lived by inhabitants. Alternatively, by the decrepancy in customs. belief, culture, the conflicts would certainly transpire as a tool for a person to commit a crime, no matter whether it was done deliberately or randomly. Moreover, considering the job in the city are scare these days, the jobseekers and applicants are not only required to have formal academic qualifications and related-job skill but also are mischevious and single-minded to be able to get the job and promotion. As being alive in the arduous and competitive working environment constitute difficult, people are very often confronted with the descrimination, ostracism or even jealousy of their counterparts due to their oustanding talent or different custom, for instance, those people, who are likely susceptible by these parameters would undoubtedly collaspe and be unempoyee. Not surprisingly, the prospect of being offenders, with inducement is aming substain themselves and their family is accomprehensible. The main final factors is the over usage of prohibited drugs and alcohols, especially with the major purpose of escaping from repetitive world or simply just for fun. There is no denying that, these alcohol would have deteriotating impact on action of the alcoholic, triggering them to be perpetually in unconcious psychology and utilize the acts of violence by distorting their temperament, utimately being criminals is the ramification for them. To addressing with the crime, the authority must evaluate the rationales elaborately to establish the possible solutions. With their dominance, the goverment could possibly capitalise on social medias such as news paper, TV, radio, through out the country, disseminating about the threat of crime and teach citizens self- defence techniques. Another methods relies on the combination of imposing tougher laws and traing a more effective police force. Not only does it penalise the offenders but also deters the prospective criminals. Besides, more interventions such as lauching anti-social campaign, creating more educational programs, assisting people to have the assess and comprehend perspective about crimes must more proliferate publicly. On top of that, for individuals citizens, crimes sometimes could be nipped in the bud if they were more viligant and brave enough to fight back or at least report the police on a crime, may be there would be more victims. Sometimes, crimes are pampered by people’s cowardice and negligence. Peole must be awear of their responsiblity to the whole society rather than avoid it. In summary, the aboved-mention fact give one a glimpse of the causes of distarity between rural and urban areas in the domain of crime rate and some suggestions to deal with. Joint endeavour by the authority and individuals citizens are highly requested to reduce the amount of criminals to hold the ethics in the community.
Crime
has always been a heated and problematic issue to every country in the world, capturing an inordinate amount of attention of the public. In recent years,
some
studies conducted the escalating
crime
rate in
matropolitan
is asserted
to have higher tendency than in the countryside. In this essay, it is worthwhile to examine
some of the
main causes and suggest
some
plausible solutions.

We may point out an indisputable fact that the
first
cause of high
crime
rate in urban area is the high divergence in ethnical terms which
sometimes
accidentally
lead to the lack of mutual understanding and empathy towards others compared to rural areas where
prodominantly
lived
by inhabitants.
Alternatively
, by the
decrepancy
in customs.
belief
, culture, the conflicts would
certainly
transpire as a tool for a person to commit a
crime
, no matter whether it
was done
deliberately
or
randomly
.
Moreover
, considering the job in the city are scare these days, the
jobseekers
and applicants are not
only
required to have formal academic qualifications and related-job
skill
but
also
are
mischevious
and single-minded to be able to
get
the job and promotion. As being alive in the arduous and competitive working environment constitute difficult,
people
are
very
often
confronted with the
descrimination
, ostracism or even jealousy of their counterparts due to their
oustanding
talent or
different
custom,
for instance
, those
people
, who are likely susceptible by these parameters would
undoubtedly
collaspe
and be
unempoyee
. Not
surprisingly
, the prospect of being offenders, with inducement is
aming
substain
themselves and their family is
accomprehensible
. The main final factors is the over usage of prohibited drugs and alcohols,
especially
with the major purpose of escaping from repetitive world or
simply
just
for fun. There is no denying that,
these alcohol
would have
deteriotating
impact on action of the alcoholic, triggering them to be
perpetually
in
unconcious
psychology and utilize the acts of violence by distorting their temperament,
utimately
being criminals is the ramification for them.

To addressing with the
crime
, the authority
must
evaluate the rationales
elaborately
to establish the possible solutions. With their dominance, the
goverment
could
possibly
capitalise
on social medias such as
news paper
, TV, radio,
through out
the country, disseminating about the threat of
crime
and teach citizens self-
defence
techniques. Another methods
relies
on the combination of imposing tougher laws and
traing
a more effective police force. Not
only
does it
penalise
the offenders
but
also
deters the prospective criminals.
Besides
, more interventions such as
lauching
anti-social campaign, creating more educational programs, assisting
people
to have
the assess
and comprehend perspective about
crimes
must
more proliferate
publicly
.
On top of that
, for individuals citizens,
crimes
sometimes
could
be nipped
in the bud if they were more
viligant
and brave
enough
to fight back or at least report the police on a
crime
,
may be
there would be more victims.
Sometimes
,
crimes
are pampered
by
people’s
cowardice and negligence.
Peole
must
be
awear
of their
responsiblity
to the whole society
rather
than avoid it.

In summary, the
aboved-mention
fact give one a glimpse of the causes of
distarity
between rural and urban areas in the domain of
crime
rate and
some
suggestions to deal with. Joint
endeavour
by the authority and individuals citizens are
highly
requested to
reduce
the amount of criminals to hold the ethics in the community.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
36Mistakes

IELTS essay Crime rate, in most countries, is often higher in urban areas than in rural areas. Why do you think that is? What can be done to reduce the crime rate? v. 5

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