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Crime rate, in most countries, is often higher in urban areas than in rural areas. Why do you think that is? What can be done to reduce the crime rate? v.1

Crime rate, in most countries, is often higher in urban areas than in rural areas. Why do you think that is? What can be done to reduce the crime rate? v. 1
Globally, there has been an increase in the level of crime in different Nations. This trend is more common in urban areas than in the rural environment. This essay will discuss why I think crime rate is higher in the urban regions compared to rural places and will profer solutions to reduce it. To begin, criminal activities are on the rise in urban places due to the increased cost of living in these areas. As more people migrate from rural areas to the urban, they discover that life in the city is more expensive in comparison with the some towns. Hence, they resort to vices to provide for their needs. For example, levels of crime in Johannesburg, South Africa is higher than the other towns because cost of living is known to be dear in Johannesburg. Also, because developed areas are usually more populated, there is competition for scarce jobs, hence unemployment rate is high. Those who are unemployed with financial responsibilities, may see criminal activities as alternative measures against lack. Although, there are more criminal acts in the cities compared to the rural areas, fortunately, if certain measures are put in place, this menace can be controlled. Firstly, the cost of basic necessities of citizens should be reduced. When people can afford amenities they need for daily living, they would not have to be involved in vices. For example, in an African country, the government had to reduce the price of Rice, which was its staple diet because people were becoming petty thieves because of hunger. Secondly, authorities of a Nation should empower their citizens with skills to generate funds if jobs are not enough. A cursory glance at China, will show the enrollment of the people by the government for various skill acquisition programs so that they can meet their needs. This has reduced the crime rate in their cities. In conclusion, criminal activity is higher in urban areas due to unemployment and high standard of living. However, if the government cuts down on the prices of the basic needs of its citizens and empower them will skills to get money, vices will be brought to the lowest level in cities.
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in
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Nations. This trend is more common in
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urban
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areas
than in the
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rural
environment. This essay will discuss why I
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think
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crime
rate is higher in the
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urban
regions compared to
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rural
places and will
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profer
solutions to
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reduce
it.

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begin
,
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criminal
activities are on the rise in
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urban
places due to the increased cost of
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living
in these
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areas
. As more
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people
migrate from
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rural
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areas
to the
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urban
, they discover that life in the city is more expensive
in comparison
with the
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some
towns.
Hence
, they resort to vices to provide for their
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needs
.
For example
, levels of
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crime
in Johannesburg, South Africa is higher than the other towns
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because
cost of
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living
is known
to be dear in Johannesburg.
Also
,
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because
developed
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areas
are
usually
more populated, there is competition for scarce jobs,
hence
unemployment rate is high. Those who
are unemployed
with financial responsibilities, may
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see
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criminal
activities as alternative measures against lack.

Although, there are more
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criminal
acts in the cities compared to the
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rural
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areas
,
fortunately
, if certain measures
are put
in place, this menace can
be controlled
.
Firstly
, the cost of
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basic necessities
of citizens should be
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reduced
. When
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people
can afford amenities they
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need
for daily
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living
, they would not
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have to
be involved
in vices.
For example
, in an African country, the
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government
had to
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reduce
the price of Rice, which was its staple diet
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because
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people
were becoming petty thieves
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because
of hunger.
Secondly
, authorities of a Nation should empower their citizens with
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skills
to generate funds if jobs are not
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enough
. A cursory glance at China, will
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show
the enrollment of the
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people
by the
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government
for various
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skill
acquisition programs
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so
that they can
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meet
their
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needs
. This has
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reduced
the
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crime
rate in their cities.

In conclusion
,
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criminal
activity is higher in
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urban
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areas
due to unemployment and high standard of
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living
.
However
, if the
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government
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cuts
down on the prices of the basic
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needs
of its citizens and empower them will
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skills
to
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get
money, vices will
be brought
to the lowest level in cities.
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35Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Crime rate, in most countries, is often higher in urban areas than in rural areas. Why do you think that is? What can be done to reduce the crime rate? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
363 words
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