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Creative artists should be given the freedom to express their ideas ( through words, pictures, music or films). However, some people think government should impose certain restrictions on them. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.2

Creative artists should be given the freedom to express their ideas ( through words, pictures, music or films). However, some people think government should impose certain restrictions on them. v. 2
Some people claim that in real democracy artists should be able to express their ideas freely while others stand for a restriction of this right. I firmly believe that this kind of freedom must not be curtailed when it comes to the creative process. To start with, the freedom of speech is a basic right of every citizen, more so for artists. The ideas of an artist are often expressed not in his speeches, but through his artistic work. For instance, a picture tells us more about the painter and his intimate thoughts and feelings than his words do. Moreover, art is impossible under restrictions. An artist shows the world from his unique point of view, and the importance of being truthful in sharing this view cannot be overestimated. If artists can only approach an issue in ways approved by the authority and if they are in fear of being thrown into prison by expressing their ideas honestly, art ceases to be art. Finally, artists should influence political decisions, not vice versa. The human development is indeed concerned with challenging old norms and proposing new ideas. If we impose restrictions on music, literature and film industry, our society will stop evolving so rapidly or even stagnate. 

In conclusion, governments should not impose censorship or restrictions on artistic creation. Artists should have their freedom of expression as long as this freedom is not used as an excuse for illegal activities.
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expressed not in his speeches,
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through his artistic work.
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, a picture
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us more about the painter and his intimate thoughts and feelings than his words do.

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, art is impossible under
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. An
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artist
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shows
the world from his unique point of view, and the importance of being truthful in sharing this view cannot
be overestimated
. If
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artists
can
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approach an issue in ways approved by the authority and if they are in fear of
being thrown
into prison by expressing their
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ideas
honestly
, art ceases to be art.

Finally
,
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artists
should influence political decisions, not vice versa. The human development is
indeed
concerned with challenging
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old
norms and proposing new
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ideas
. If we impose
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restrictions
on music, literature and film industry, our society will
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stop
evolving
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so
rapidly
or even stagnate.
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In conclusion
,
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governments
should not impose censorship or
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restrictions
on artistic creation.
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Artists
should have their
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freedom
of expression as long as this
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freedom
is not
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used
as an excuse for illegal activities.
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19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Creative artists should be given the freedom to express their ideas ( through words, pictures, music or films). However, some people think government should impose certain restrictions on them. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
239 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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