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Creative artists should always be given the freedom to express their own ideas (in words, pictures, music or film) in whichever way they wish. There should be no government restrictions on what they do. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion. v.1

Creative artists should always be given the freedom to express their own ideas (in words, pictures, music or film) in whichever way they wish. There should be no government restrictions on what they do. with this opinion. v. 1
It is generally accepted that creativity should come along with no restrictions, even by government; therefore, reasonably, the freedom should be given to creative artists. Put differently, artists should have the right to express their own ideas in whatever ways they like. Undoubtedly, creativity, in some sense, means no confines, and without confines, creative artists could produce attractive, original works in ways they prefer, and in that way their works could convey all their ideas effectively. “The Reader”, adapted into a movie from a book and both are exciting, is a perfect example best illustrated the importance of the on-restriction for artists. Moreover, understandingly, only with this no-restriction can the world become a better civilized one, in which people could express their thoughts in numerous ways freely. Provided that artists can say their ideas in whatever way they wish, the diversity of the culture and spirits will certainly boom, thus, we can elevate our physiological states, as well as enjoy feasts in physical lives, like Avatar brought to us. However, not all the good will brings good results. For one thing, some people create some ideas, and those ideas are essentially wrong, like the disabled are doomed in lower class and should be discriminated. Then, someone adapts them into a film with special effects. Hence, it may prevail among people, including children who are easily accepted these wrong thoughts as norms. Move horribly, a few people might utilize the no-restriction regulations to spread antigovernment ideas in disguised, favorable ways, which would probably damage the stability of a society. These aspects are better expelled from the no-restriction zone. All in all, I think government restrictions of ways artists could use should diminish to some extent, but not completely. There are indeed some areas that need regulations. With the accurate circumference of restriction, I believe the world will become more civilized, cultures will diversify, and our lives will be enriched.
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that creativity should
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come
along with no restrictions, even by
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government
;
therefore
,
reasonably
, the freedom should be
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given
to creative
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artists
. Put
differently
,
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artists
should have the right to express their
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own
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ideas
in whatever
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ways
they like.

Undoubtedly
, creativity, in
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some
sense, means no confines, and without confines, creative
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artists
could produce attractive, original works in
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ways
they prefer, and in that
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way
their works could convey all their
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ideas
effectively
. “The Reader”, adapted into a movie from a book and both are exciting, is a perfect example best illustrated the importance of the on-restriction for
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artists
.
Moreover
,
understandingly
,
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only
with this no-restriction can the world become a better civilized one, in which
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people
could express their thoughts in numerous
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ways
freely
. Provided that
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artists
can say their
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ideas
in whatever
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way
they wish, the diversity of the culture and spirits will
certainly
boom,
thus
, we can elevate our physiological states,
as well
as enjoy feasts in physical
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lives
, like Avatar brought to us.

However
, not all the
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good
will brings
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good
results. For one thing,
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some
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people
create
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some
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ideas
, and those
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ideas
are
essentially
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wrong
, like the disabled
are doomed
in lower
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class
and should
be discriminated
. Then, someone adapts them into a film with special effects.
Hence
, it may prevail among
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people
, including children who are
easily
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accepted
these
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wrong
thoughts as norms.
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Move
horribly
, a few
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people
might utilize the no-restriction regulations to spread
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antigovernment
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ideas
in disguised, favorable
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ways
, which would
probably
damage the stability of a society. These aspects are better expelled from the no-restriction zone.

All in all, I
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think
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government
restrictions of
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ways
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artists
could
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use
should diminish to
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some
extent,
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but
not completely. There are
indeed
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some
areas that need regulations. With the accurate circumference of restriction, I believe the world will become more civilized, cultures will diversify, and our
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lives
will
be enriched
.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay Creative artists should always be given the freedom to express their own ideas (in words, pictures, music or film) in whichever way they wish. There should be no government restrictions on what they do. with this opinion. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
318 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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