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Countries with a long average working time are more economically successful than those countries which do not have a long working time. v. 7

Although countries with long average working hours are economically successful, this often has some negative social consequences.

The duration of working hours has always been a contentious issue and it has been observed that the nations who are wealthy as a result of indulging the population into a longer schedule at work, often find its ramifications on local communities. If asked, I firmly bolster the laid statement. My justification is elaborated in the ensuing paragraphs. Many arguments can be put forward to support my inclination. The foremost one is the loss of work-life balance as a result of a strenuous working schedule. In other words, people certainly find it difficult to cope with the social and economic responsibilities simultaneously and this impediment has been augmented by the allurement of money obtained through the more than sufficient amount of working hours ignoring the societal perspectives and requirements. Moreover, the absence of recreational activities and a flexible working schedule from an individual’s life certainly result in disputes in family life. A person not able enough to give abundant time to his spouse, children as well as family groups and in the end, to the society, ultimately lost his interest and enthusiasm in the family and social relations. In addition to this, countries who have invested their most important asset-their population into prolonged office hours sighting the future economical development are becoming more aware of the shortcomings and negligence in the implemented strategies. For instance, after being a victim of nuclear attack during the second world war, Japan directed its public to give more emphasis on the industrial development and work culture consequently resulting in the loss of interest of the public in a marriage as well as family life and left out more than half of its young generation without any concern related to the society. To conclude, I would like to reiterate my narrative that although longer working hours are vital for an economical growth of any nation, the priority should be equally given not only to the work culture but also to the community relations and its welfare.

IELTS essay Although countries with long average working hours are economically successful, this often has some negative social consequences. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The duration of working hours has always been a contentious issue and it has
been observed
that the nations who are wealthy
as a result
of indulging the population into a longer schedule at work,
often
find its ramifications on local communities. If asked, I
firmly
bolster the laid statement. My justification
is elaborated
in the ensuing paragraphs.
Many
arguments can
be put
forward to support my inclination. The foremost one is the loss of work-life balance
as a result
of a strenuous working schedule.
In other words
,
people
certainly
find it difficult to cope with the social and economic responsibilities
simultaneously
and this impediment has
been augmented
by the allurement of money obtained through the more than sufficient amount of working hours ignoring the societal perspectives and requirements.
Moreover
, the absence of recreational activities and a flexible working schedule from an individual’s life
certainly
result in disputes in family life. A person not able
enough
to give abundant time to his spouse, children
as well
as family groups and in the
end
, to the society,
ultimately
lost his interest and enthusiasm in the family and social relations.
In addition
to this, countries who have invested their most
important
asset-their population into prolonged office hours sighting the future
economical
development are becoming more aware of the shortcomings and negligence in the implemented strategies.
For instance
, after being a victim of nuclear attack during the second world war, Japan directed its public to give more emphasis on the industrial development and work culture
consequently
resulting in the loss of interest of the public in a marriage
as well
as family life and
left
out more than half of its young generation without any concern related to the society.
To conclude
, I would like to reiterate my narrative that although longer working hours are vital for an
economical
growth of any nation, the priority should be
equally
given
not
only
to the work culture
but
also
to the community relations and its welfare.
17Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
5 paragraphs
331 words
6.5
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