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Countries around the world will be facing significant challenges relating to the environment, population and education as well. What problems will your country face in the next 10 years? How can these problems be overcome v.1

Countries around the world will be facing significant challenges relating to the environment, population and education as well. What problems will your country face in the next 10 years? How can these problems be overcome v. 1
IN THE PRESENT TIME, EACH AND EVERY NATIO EXPERIENCING SOME OF PROBLEM SUCH AS GLOBAL WARMING, OVER OR DECLINE LIFE EXPECTANCY RATE, ESPECIALLY IN THE DEVELOPING COUNTRY LIKE INDIA WHERE PEOPLE ARE NOT INFORMED OR AWARE OF THE ESSENTIALNESS OF THE BASIC KNOWLEDGE. FIRSTLY, THIS ESSAY WILL DISCUSS THE INCREASED LIFE EXPECTANCY RATE IN INDIA IN NEXT 10 YEARS AND SECONDLY, STATE THAT HOW THE AWARENESS IN THE PUBLIC CAN ABLE TO SOLVE THE MENACE TO SOME EXTENT. ON THE ISSUE SIDE, THE MAJOR PROBLEM IN MY TERRITORY WOULD BE A POPULATION. AS THERE IS A BANN IN THE ABORTION AND NO FAMILY PLANNING AMONG THE COUPLE LEADS TO THE SITUATION WHERE THEY HAVE TO ACCEPT THE PREGNANCY AND GIVE BIRTH TO THE CHILD. CONSEQUENTLY, LESS NUMBER OF EDUCATED CIVILIAN IN THE DEVELOPING COUNTRIES. FOR EXAMPLE, BIRTH RATE REPORT OF THE INDIA REVEALED THAT 80% BABIES ARE THE RESULT OF LACK OF DESCEDANT PLANNING AND AWARENESS. ON THE SOLUTION SIDE, THE NECESSARY STEP IS TO TACKLE THIS MENACE IS THAT PUBLIC SHOULD BE KNOWLEDGABLE ABOUT HOW TO CONTROL THE GENERATION EXPANSION AND NEED TO FOLLOW THE NUCLEAR GENERATION PATTERN. THIS COULD BE ACHIEVED BY ARRANGING AWARENESS PROGRAM BY THE GOVERNMENT. THIS MAKE CITIZENS AWAKE OF THE CONSEQUENCIES OF HAVING TOO MANY CHILD IN THE GENERATION AND ALSO, SMALL FAMILY DECLINED THE BURDEN OF BREEDING AND NUTURING COST. FOR INSTANCE, BRITAN FAMALIES SURVEY SHOWN THAT THEY ARE HAPPY AND LIVING PIECEFUL LIFE AS THEY OWNS A NUCLEAR FAMILY. HOWEVER THE OVER POPULATION CAN BE REDUCED BY MIGRATING TO OTHER EXPANDING NATIONS LIKE CANADA, NEWZELAND. THIS MAKE THAT COUNTRY MORE ECONOMICALLY STABLE. IN CONCUSION, AS PER THE NATURE'S LAW, NO ONE IS FREE FROM ALL THE PROBLEM EVEN A COUNTRIES HAVE TO FACE SUCH SITUATIONS ON WHICH THEY DO NOT HAVE ANY ONTROL. ALTHOUGH, IF GOVERNMENT AND INDIVIDUAL WORK AS A TEAM THN SURELY, THEY CAN FIGHT WITH ANY ISSUE. IN CONCLUSION,
IN THE PRESENT TIME, EACH AND EVERY
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NATIO
EXPERIENCING
Consider using "SOME PROBLEM" or "SOME of the PROBLEM".
SOME OF PROBLEM
SUCH AS GLOBAL WARMING, OVER OR DECLINE LIFE EXPECTANCY RATE,
ESPECIALLY
IN THE DEVELOPING
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COUNTRY
LIKE INDIA WHERE
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
PEOPLE
ARE NOT INFORMED OR AWARE OF THE
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ESSENTIALNESS
OF THE BASIC KNOWLEDGE.
FIRSTLY
, THIS ESSAY WILL DISCUSS THE INCREASED LIFE EXPECTANCY RATE IN INDIA IN
NEXT
10 YEARS AND
SECONDLY
, STATE THAT HOW THE AWARENESS IN THE PUBLIC
Please check whether one of these words is redundant.
CAN ABLE TO
SOLVE THE MENACE TO
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SOME
EXTENT.

ON THE ISSUE SIDE, THE MAJOR PROBLEM IN MY TERRITORY WOULD BE A POPULATION. AS THERE IS A
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BANN
IN THE ABORTION AND NO FAMILY PLANNING AMONG THE COUPLE LEADS TO THE SITUATION WHERE THEY
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
HAVE TO
ACCEPT THE PREGNANCY AND GIVE BIRTH TO THE CHILD.
CONSEQUENTLY
, LESS NUMBER OF EDUCATED CIVILIAN IN THE DEVELOPING
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COUNTRIES
.
FOR EXAMPLE
, BIRTH RATE REPORT OF THE INDIA REVEALED THAT 80% BABIES ARE THE RESULT OF LACK OF
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DESCEDANT
PLANNING AND AWARENESS.

ON THE SOLUTION SIDE, THE NECESSARY STEP IS TO TACKLE THIS MENACE IS THAT PUBLIC SHOULD BE
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KNOWLEDGABLE
ABOUT HOW TO CONTROL THE GENERATION EXPANSION AND NEED TO FOLLOW THE NUCLEAR GENERATION PATTERN. THIS COULD
BE ACHIEVED
BY ARRANGING AWARENESS PROGRAM BY THE
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GOVERNMENT
. THIS
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MAKE
CITIZENS AWAKE OF THE
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CONSEQUENCIES
OF HAVING TOO
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MANY CHILD
IN THE GENERATION AND
ALSO
,
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SMALL
FAMILY DECLINED THE BURDEN OF BREEDING AND
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NUTURING
COST.
FOR INSTANCE
,
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BRITAN
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FAMALIES
SURVEY SHOWN THAT THEY ARE HAPPY AND LIVING
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PIECEFUL
LIFE AS THEY
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OWNS
A NUCLEAR FAMILY.

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HOWEVER
THE OVER POPULATION CAN BE
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REDUCED
BY MIGRATING TO OTHER EXPANDING NATIONS LIKE CANADA,
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NEWZELAND
. THIS
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MAKE
THAT
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COUNTRY
MORE
ECONOMICALLY
STABLE.

IN
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CONCUSION
, AS PER THE NATURE'S LAW, NO ONE IS FREE FROM ALL THE PROBLEM EVEN A
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
COUNTRIES
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
HAVE TO
FACE SUCH SITUATIONS ON WHICH THEY DO NOT HAVE ANY
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ONTROL
. ALTHOUGH, IF
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GOVERNMENT
AND INDIVIDUAL WORK AS A TEAM
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THN
SURELY
, THEY CAN FIGHT WITH ANY ISSUE.

IN CONCLUSION
,
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Countries around the world will be facing significant challenges relating to the environment, population and education as well. What problems will your country face in the next 10 years? How can these problems be overcome v. 1

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
320 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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