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Countries around the world will be facing significant challenges relating not only to the environment but population and education as well. What problems will your country face in the next ten years? How can these problems be overcome? v.7

Countries around the world will be facing significant challenges relating not only to the environment but population and education as well. What problems will your country face in the next ten years? How can these problems be overcome? v. 7
These days, there are indeed more and more global outstanding challenges that come from several fields such as environment, education, and population. The following essay will take a look at several problems caused by this tendency in Jordan in decades and point out various effective solutions should be tacked to improve the situation as well. On one side of the situation, overpopulation is one of the most common issues that caused unemployment. Thereby, a citizen cannot get the opportunities to find a stable career to provide a comfortable life for their families. For example, the financial sector has limited internal fiscal capacity to implement major projects. So, architects are resorting to working in other sectors to confront the tariffs and taxes imposed by the government. So, that’s why some think that hard choices need to be made and critical projects with low-cost ratios should be targeted to increase employment to afford convenience to reside. On the other side, in spite of these challenges governments should set solutions and regulations decades to solving these issues. For instance, overpopulated countries have such legislation which prohibits family to have more than two children per family. Building an educated nation is the only solution to this heinous problem. Until the citizen understand the seriousness of having more than two kids in the country, other measures that the government takes would be valueless. In conclusion, all the nations around the world that are facing this challenge should take several measurements to control the figure of citizen number. And politics and the government have vital roles to play on this occasion along with the awareness among the citizens. The unemployment is at its highest rate and the economic inflation made the lifestyle harder.
These days, there are
indeed
more and more global outstanding challenges that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
from several fields such as environment, education, and population. The following essay will take a look at several problems caused by this tendency in Jordan in decades and point out various effective solutions should
be tacked
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
the situation
as well
.

On one side of the situation, overpopulation is one of the most common issues that caused unemployment. Thereby, a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
citizen
cannot
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
the opportunities to find a stable career to provide a comfortable life for their families.
For example
, the financial sector has limited internal fiscal capacity to implement major projects.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
, architects are resorting to working in other sectors to confront the tariffs and taxes imposed by the
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government
.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
, that’s why
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some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that
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hard
choices need to
be made
and critical projects with low-cost ratios should
be targeted
to increase employment to afford convenience to reside.

On the other side,
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in spite of
these challenges
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
governments
should set solutions and regulations decades to solving these issues.
For instance
, overpopulated countries have such legislation which prohibits family to have more than two children per family. Building an educated nation is the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
solution to this heinous problem. Until the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
citizen
understand the seriousness of having more than two kids in the country, other measures that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
takes would be valueless.

In conclusion
, all the nations around the world that are facing this challenge should take several measurements to control the figure of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
citizen
number. And politics and the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
have vital roles to play on this occasion along with the awareness among the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
citizens
. The unemployment is at its highest rate and the economic inflation made the lifestyle harder.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Countries around the world will be facing significant challenges relating not only to the environment but population and education as well. What problems will your country face in the next ten years? How can these problems be overcome? v. 7

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
287 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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