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Countries around the world will be facing significant challenges relating not only to the environment, but population and education as well. What problems will your country face in the next ten years? How can these problems be overcome? Give reasons for your v.11

Countries around the world will be facing significant challenges relating not only to the environment, but population and education as well. What problems will your country face in the next ten years? How can these problems be overcome? Give reasons for your v. 11
There is no gainsaying that the topic “expected environmental challenges to countries” gains immediate attention owing to its uniqueness. Down the centuries, there has been a drastic change in our lifestyle, due to everyday innovations and technology advancements. However, these inventions also have adversely affected our lives. Such as, many countries around the globe, are suffering with pollution, environmental threats and in the education field. My country is even facing many threats, for instance, shortage of clean water, pollution and most importantly, inflammatory population. I shall discuss all these issues in detail in following paragraphs. To begin with, one of the most fatal challenge, I foresee for my country is lack of clean water in coming years. In many cities, people are already deprived of clean water and purchase it at a very high cost. There should be aggressive media campaigns to run across the country to avoid water wastage. Another essential long lasting step would be dam constructions. In addition to this, another major concern is pollution. With the ease of auto lease, everyone is now in a position to afford a car. Consequently, there are 10 times more cars on the road as compared to previous decade. More transportation, more fuel consumption resulting in more pollution in the air. Government should encourage people to commute through trains and buses; furthermore, cycle concept can be enforced like in placed in China. Coming towards a very core issue that requires immediate attention, is to control population. More people means more area required to live and more resources consumption. This dilemma is interlinked with another concern of demolishing country side and construction of houses which will eventually bring environmental challenges. Government should pay attention to create awareness about preventive measure to control child birth. To recapitulate the aforementioned topic, I my opinion, all these issues are self triggered. It’s not Government responsibility only to rectify these issues. We, as a nation should also play our part and contribute towards society betterment in every possible aspect.
There is no gainsaying that the topic “
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expected
environmental challenges to
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countries”
gains immediate attention owing to its uniqueness. Down the centuries, there has been a drastic
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change
in our lifestyle, due to everyday innovations and technology advancements.
However
, these inventions
also
have
adversely
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affected
our
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lives
. Such as,
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many
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countries
around the globe, are suffering with
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pollution
, environmental threats and in the education field. My
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country
is even facing
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many
threats,
for instance
, shortage of clean
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water
,
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pollution
and most
importantly
, inflammatory population. I shall discuss all these
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issues
in detail in following paragraphs.

To
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begin
with, one of the most fatal
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challenge
, I foresee for my
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country
is lack of clean
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water
in coming years. In
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many
cities,
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people
are already deprived of clean
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water
and
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purchase
it at a
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very
high cost. There should be aggressive media campaigns to run across the
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country
to avoid
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water
wastage. Another essential
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long lasting
step would be dam constructions.
In addition
to this, another major concern is
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pollution
. With the
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ease
of auto lease, everyone is
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now
in a position to afford a car.
Consequently
, there are 10 times more cars on the road as compared to previous decade. More transportation, more fuel consumption resulting in more
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pollution
in the air.
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Government
should encourage
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people
to commute through trains and buses;
furthermore
, cycle concept can
be enforced
like
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in placed in
China.

Coming towards a
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very
core
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issue
that requires immediate attention, is to control population. More
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people
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means
more area required to
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live
and more
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resources
consumption. This dilemma
is interlinked
with another concern of demolishing
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country
side and construction of
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houses
which will
eventually
bring environmental challenges.
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Government
should pay attention to create awareness about preventive measure to control child birth.

To recapitulate the aforementioned topic, I my opinion, all these
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issues
are self triggered. It’s not
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Government
responsibility
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only
to rectify these
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issues
. We, as a nation should
also
play our part and contribute towards society betterment in every possible aspect.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay Countries around the world will be facing significant challenges relating not only to the environment, but population and education as well. What problems will your country face in the next ten years? How can these problems be overcome? Give reasons for your v. 11

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
334 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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