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Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. v.27

Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. v. 27
The differences between nations in terms of their lifestyle, food habit, fashion, choices and traditions have already reduced to a great extent with the effects of globalisation, technology and international agreements for open trade facilities. Since most of the international products are easily accessible globally, people have far more choices and freedom which have enhanced people's lifestyle besides narrowing the gaps among nations. I postulate this trend a positive development and the reasons are explained in this essay. To begin with, the availability of international brands like Apple, Google, Nike, Pepsi, Johnson's, Samsung, Amazon, Toyota etc. in a country enables consumers to purchase quality products. For instance, someone in India can use the same technological products from Intel and Microsoft that an American uses and it facilitates reducing gaps between these two countries. 'Barrier & gaps' among nations was a predominant reason for conflicts and with the advancement of the technology and mutual trade agreements, nations are aware of the foreign cultures more than they did ever before. This diminishes the world tension and helps prevail the peace. Furthermore, affluent countries have created a vast market for the consumer products and this has helped them establish offshore offices and factories in developing nations. This is a mutually beneficial agreement that helps both parties. Furthermore, local consumers are not trapped with the low-quality local products and a wider freedom lets them enjoy a better lifestyle. With the competition, local manufacturers are forced to produce quality products at a competitive price. With this development, some local companies have gained international recognition as a manufacturer. To conclude, the concept of boundaries and countries divides nations and create the master-slave relationship as we have already witnessed in the history. The present era has plummeted this heinous trend to a great extent and the similar lifestyle and availability of international products have helped this to happen.
The differences between
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nations
in terms of their
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lifestyle
, food habit, fashion, choices and traditions have already
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reduced
to a great extent with the effects of
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globalisation
, technology and
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international
agreements for open trade facilities. Since most of the
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international
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products
are
easily
accessible globally,
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people
have far more choices and freedom which have enhanced
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people
's
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lifestyle
besides
narrowing the gaps among
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nations
. I postulate this trend a
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positive
development and the reasons are
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explained
in this essay.

To
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begin
with, the availability of
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international
brands like Apple, Google, Nike, Pepsi, Johnson's, Samsung, Amazon, Toyota etc. in a
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country
enables consumers to
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purchase
quality
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products
.
For instance
, someone in India can
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use
the same technological
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products
from Intel and Microsoft that an American
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uses
and it facilitates reducing gaps between these two
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countries
. 'Barrier & gaps' among
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nations
was a predominant reason for conflicts and with the advancement of the technology and mutual trade agreements,
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nations
are aware of the foreign cultures more than they did ever
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before
. This diminishes the world tension and
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helps
prevail the peace.
Furthermore
, affluent
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countries
have created a vast market for the consumer
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products
and this has
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helped
them establish offshore offices and factories in developing
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nations
. This is a
mutually
beneficial agreement that
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helps
both parties.

Furthermore
,
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local
consumers are not trapped with the low-quality
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local
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products
and a wider freedom
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lets
them enjoy a better
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lifestyle
. With the competition,
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local
manufacturers
are forced
to produce quality
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products
at a competitive price. With this development,
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some
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local
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companies
have gained
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international
recognition as a manufacturer.

To conclude
, the concept of boundaries and
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countries
divides
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nations
and create the master-slave relationship as we have already witnessed in the history. The present era has plummeted this heinous trend to a great extent and the similar
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lifestyle
and availability of
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international
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products
have
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helped
this to happen.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
30Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. v. 27

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
311 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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