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Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Is it a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.15

Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Is it a positive or negative development? v. 15
This topic is based on the claim that due to factors like globalization, technology and international agreements for open trade facilities have led to dwindling the gap between nations in terms of lifestyle, food habits, fashion, and cultures. Nowadays, most of the international products are easily accessible globally, which has given people far more choices and freedom which resulted in enhanced people's lifestyles. In my opinion, a positive step towards global advancement. Having said that, I will share my views in the given essay. To begin with, many of the international brands like Apple, Samsung, Pepsi, Nike have availability across many countries which enabled the district consumers to buy quality products. For instance, In India, people can buy the same technological products from Apple and Samsung that America uses which makes easier reducing the gap between both countries. In terms of fashion, people have easily accessible to western brands like Adidas, Puma, Gap, Guess as these clothing line has established offshore offices and factories in developing countries. Furthermore, local customers have benefited most due to this positive trend that has seen growth employment for district people. Moreover, motivating the local manufacturers to produce quality products at competitive prices. With this development, many local companies have gained recognition at an international platform. For instance, Raymond, an Indian famous brand, due to its sheer popularity has the presence of manufacturing plants in developed countries like America, Germany, and Italy. Finally, I base my views on the fact that globalization has revolutionized the whole world. I am of the opinion that the advantages of such developments outweigh its pitfalls. So, I hope that such developments should be continued to make this globe a better place for human beings and narrow the bridges and gaps between nations
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is based
on the claim that due to factors like globalization, technology and
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international
agreements for open trade facilities have led to dwindling the
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gap
between nations in terms of lifestyle, food habits, fashion, and cultures. Nowadays, most of the
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international
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products
are
easily
accessible globally, which has
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people
far more choices and freedom which resulted in enhanced
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people
's lifestyles. In my opinion, a
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positive
step towards global advancement. Having said that, I will share my views in the
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given
essay.

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of the
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many
countries which enabled the district consumers to
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buy
quality
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products
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For instance
, In India,
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people
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the same technological
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from Apple and Samsung that America
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between both countries. In terms of fashion,
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people
have
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, Guess as these clothing line has established offshore offices and factories in
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developing countries
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trend that has
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growth employment for district
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people
.
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, motivating the local manufacturers to produce quality
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products
at competitive prices. With this development,
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many
local
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companies
have gained recognition at an
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international
platform.
For instance
, Raymond, an Indian
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famous
brand, due to its sheer popularity has the presence of manufacturing plants in
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developed countries
like America, Germany, and Italy.

Finally
, I base my views on the fact that globalization has revolutionized the whole world. I am of the opinion that the advantages of such developments outweigh its pitfalls.
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, I hope that such developments should
be continued
to
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make
this globe a better place for human beings and narrow the bridges and
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gaps
between nations
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IELTS essay Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Is it a positive or negative development? v. 15

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
292 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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