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Computers are often argued to be the most important invention of the last hundred years. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.8

Computers are often argued to be the most important invention of the last hundred years. with this statement? v. 8
It's argued that is the best innovation has been done by human is computers. This essay agrees with the statement because it changes the way we live. And Made our life easier. Firstly, Screens changed the world. People have been closer even it if they were far from each other in the distance. Also it made some jobs disappear, but generates other interesting fields. Such as, The mail was a job, but now it sent and arrive in seconds. Even after contacting with a relative that lives far away from you now you can call it in video and know everything about them on a daily basis. Also, people has lack of resources or of knowledge, but right now you can look for online library and you will access information from a reliable source. Secondly, Devices made our lives easier. And really shorten the amount of time that we have to spend doing things. People used to wait in lines for hours just to get a ticket now you can book it online in your place without waiting for a long day. For instance, Ielts exam used to take 3 hours just to finish it. Not to mention the stress and you have to clear your answers in another sheet. For that, Now you can click for the right choice or type it via the keyboard. And it really shortens the time that you spent for exam and make you feel comfortable. To conclude, Computers really helped people achieving what they want in less time and made us deal with things differently.
It's argued
that is
the best innovation has
been done
by human is computers. This essay
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with the statement
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because
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changes
the way we
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live
. And Made our life easier.

Firstly
, Screens
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changed
the world.
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People
have been closer even it if they were far from each other in the distance.
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Also
it made
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some
jobs disappear,
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but
generates other interesting fields. Such as, The mail was a job,
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but
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now
it
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sent
and arrive in seconds. Even after contacting with a relative that
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lives
far away from you
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now
you can call it in video and
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know
everything about them on a daily basis.
Also
,
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people
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has
lack of resources or of knowledge,
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but
right
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now
you can look for online library and you will access information from a reliable source.

Secondly
, Devices made our
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lives
easier. And
really
shorten the amount of time that we
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have to
spend doing things.
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People
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used
to wait in lines for hours
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just
to
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get
a ticket
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now
you can book it online in your place without waiting for a long day.
For instance
,
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Ielts
exam
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used
to take 3 hours
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just
to finish it. Not to mention the
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stress
and you
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have to
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clear
your answers in another sheet. For that,
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Now
you can click for the right choice or type it via the keyboard. And it
really
shortens the time that you spent for exam and
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make
you feel comfortable.

To conclude
, Computers
really
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helped
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people
achieving what they want in less time and made us deal with things
differently
.
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9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS essay Computers are often argued to be the most important invention of the last hundred years. with this statement? v. 8

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
262 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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