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Write about the following topic: Computers are often argued to be the most important invention of the last hundred years. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. v.7

: Computers are often argued to be the most important invention of the last hundred years. with this statement? v. 7
Computer are not only PCs and laptops, they are also cars, microwaves, TVs, and any other device that has a small chip that control it. There are many people are of the opinion that they are the most significant invention in the last decades. I strongly agree with that, and in this essay, I will discuss why this is correct. Firstly, discuss how they can help us develop faster, then, how they make our communication an easy matter. To begin with, Computers help us develop much faster because of the outstanding support that they are giving to the other sectors, such as medicine and space. This is due to that fact that they can do extremely complex calculations, which their results may be needed to prove new theories, in seconds, while if we are in the past, they may take months. For instance, a report from the University of Jordan showed that more than 90% of the medical labs in Jordan use computer to find their experiments' results. Furthermore, They can build virtual environments that can simulate real ones, or others that are from the past and are not available now. This can help us understand what would be happening in the future and what has happened in the past. For instance, the last report from NASA illustrated that it uses computers to build virtual environments that look identically like our space. Clearly, computers have a significant positive effect on our scientific life, which help us develop in a brilliant way. Moreover, computers play a major role in our lives, they affect the way that we are communicating right now and the way that spread the information. Firstly, It makes our communication between us much easier and faster than in the past. This is because that you can now call your mother, who lives on the other side of the world, and see her live. A prime example of that is the massegner application for Facebook company. It allows you to call anyone around the world at anytime with free of charge. Moreover, they help the process of moving and spreading the data among the people a piece of cake matter. Now, you can visit any website on the internet and read news and articles from all around the world. For example, a website called Mowdoo3, which is an Arabic site, has thousands of articles that have been written by writers from different countries and they are being read by readers from all around the word. To clarify, electrical devices make our communication and moving the information simple and fast. To conclude, electric devices on of the most important thing in our life. This is due to the impacts that they have on our life on different levels, such as helping other fields developing awfully, and allowing data moving smoothly.
Computer are not
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only
PCs and laptops, they are
also
cars, microwaves, TVs, and any
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other
device that has a
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small
chip that control it. There are
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many
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people
are of the opinion that they are the most significant invention in the last decades. I
strongly
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agree
with that, and in this essay, I will discuss why this is correct.
Firstly
, discuss how they can
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help
us develop faster, then, how they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
our communication an easy matter.

To
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begin
with, Computers
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help
us develop much faster
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because
of the outstanding support that they are giving to the
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other
sectors, such as medicine and space. This is due to that fact that they can do
extremely
complex calculations, which their results may
be needed
to prove new theories, in seconds, while if we are in the
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past
, they may take months.
For instance
, a report from the University of Jordan
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showed
that more than 90% of the medical labs in Jordan
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use
computer to find their experiments' results.
Furthermore
, They can build virtual environments that can simulate real ones, or others that are from the
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past
and are not available
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now
. This can
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help
us understand what would be happening in the future and what has happened in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
past
.
For instance
, the last report from NASA illustrated that it
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uses
computers to build virtual environments that look
identically
like our space.
Clearly
, computers have a significant
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positive
effect on our scientific life, which
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help
us develop
Consider replacing "in a brilliant way" with the adverb for "brilliant"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in a brilliant way
.

Moreover
, computers play a major role in our
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lives
, they affect the way that we are communicating right
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now
and the way that spread the information.
Firstly
, It
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makes
our communication between us much easier and faster than in the
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past
. This is
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because
that you can
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now
call your mother, who
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lives
on the
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other
side of the world, and
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see
her
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live
. A prime example of
that is
the
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massegner
application for Facebook
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company
. It
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allows
you to call anyone around the world at anytime with free of charge.
Moreover
, they
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help
the process of moving and spreading the data among the
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people
a piece of cake matter.
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Now
, you can visit any website on the internet and read news and articles from all around the world.
For example
, a website called Mowdoo3, which is an Arabic site, has thousands of articles that have
been written
by writers from
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
countries and
they are
being read
by readers from all around the word. To clarify, electrical devices
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make
our communication and moving the information simple and
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fast
.

To conclude
, electric devices
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on
of the most
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important
thing in our life. This is due to the impacts that they have on our life on
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different
levels, such as helping
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other
fields developing awfully, and allowing data moving
smoothly
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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Nelson Mandela

IELTS essay : Computers are often argued to be the most important invention of the last hundred years. with this statement? v. 7

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
470 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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