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Computers are often argued to be the most important invention of the last hundred years. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.4

Computers are often argued to be the most important invention of the last hundred years. with this statement? v. 4
Inventions play a major role in the evolution of human beings. The first development of human beings may be fire. From then on, humans started to invent and discover, and improvised what they have found in the early years. Now we are living in a modern era of the 21st century where we believe that computers are the most important gadgets of the last hundred years. I strongly disagree with the last statement. Out of so many innovations in the world, how do we evaluate which is the most important. Really a hard process, isn't it? On the other hand the answer to this question is very simple. For example, a bicycle could be a great invention for a pedestrian and the radium could be a wonderful life-saving invention for a cancer patient. If you ask me, I would say an air conditioner is the greatest of all the inventions to live in such a polluted world. If you ask human beings from different religions and ethnicity from different parts of the world, many will stand by my statement that computer is not the greatest of all the creations. If anybody would stand against my arguments, I would simply bet them to live a life with a laptop or a Mac Air without electricity. Nobody would dare to take the risk as they knew that they cannot survive without electricity and it is the same in the case of their laptop or desktop. The use of a bicycle cannot be replaced by a juicer and the use of a helicopter cannot be replaced by an aeroplane. Every device is born out of someone's need and is unique in its way. The fact is, none of the inventions that were invented and the yet to be invented cannot replace the place of another.
Inventions play a major role in the evolution of
human
beings. The
first
development of
human
beings may be fire. From then on,
humans
started
to invent and discover, and improvised what they have found in the early years.
Now
we are living in a modern era of the 21st century where we believe that computers are the most
important
gadgets of the last hundred years.

I
strongly
disagree with the last statement. Out of
so
many
innovations in the world, how do we evaluate which is the most
important
.
Really
a
hard
process, isn't it?
On the other hand
the answer to this question is
very
simple.
For example
, a bicycle could be a great invention for a pedestrian and the radium could be a wonderful life-saving invention for a cancer patient. If you ask me, I would say an air conditioner is the greatest of all the inventions to
live
in such a polluted world.

If you ask
human
beings from
different
religions and ethnicity from
different
parts of the world,
many
will stand by my statement that computer is not the greatest of all the creations.
If
anybody
would stand
against my arguments, I would
simply
bet them to
live
a life with a laptop or a Mac Air without electricity. Nobody would dare to take the
risk
as they knew that they cannot survive without electricity and it is the same in the case of their laptop or desktop.

The
use
of a bicycle cannot
be replaced
by a juicer and the
use
of a helicopter cannot
be replaced
by an
aeroplane
. Every device
is born
out of someone's need and is unique in its way. The fact is, none of the inventions that
were invented
and the
yet
to
be invented
cannot replace the place of another.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Computers are often argued to be the most important invention of the last hundred years. with this statement? v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
302 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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