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Computers are often argued to be the most important invention of the last hundred years. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.1

Computers are often argued to be the most important invention of the last hundred years. with this statement? v. 1
It is argued by people that computers are the most prominent man-made creation of the past decade. Despite having other important breakthroughs, I completely agree with this statement as computers have shaped the way we live nowadays and I believe their effect is far deeper than any other invention. Computers have an indispensable role in our lives today. They have changed the way humans live and have made our lives so much easier. Firstly, the development of computers made communication much easier for everyone. People nowadays do not have to wait weeks or even months to communicate with their loved ones, instead, they can send and receive messages in seconds. Secondly, navigation has been difficult and many people were lost in the past before technology, however, nowadays people can go anywhere they wanted using their computers or smartphones with the help of Google Maps. Finally, computers have made education was made easier and more efficient. Students in the past few decades had to visit multiple libraries and waste a lot of time to find a book they wanted. Today, they can either download books or purchase them online which saves them a lot of time and effort. Furthermore, anyone in any country with an internet connection can access thousands of online courses and learn whatever they want. For instance, people in poor countries can take free online courses and read books as long as they have a computer and an internet connection. In conclusion, it is hard to think of any area of our lives that computers and technology have not changed. It is true that there are various inventions in the past decade that were noteworthy, yet the impact of computers remains the greatest, thus, in my opinion, it is the most essential device humans have ever made.
It
is argued
by
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people
that computers are the most prominent
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man
-made creation of the
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past
decade. Despite having other
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important
breakthroughs, I completely
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agree
with this statement as computers have shaped the way we
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live
nowadays and I believe their effect is far deeper than any other invention.

Computers have an indispensable role in our
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lives
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today
. They have
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changed
the way humans
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live
and have made our
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lives
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so
much easier.
Firstly
, the development of computers made communication much easier for everyone.
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People
nowadays do not
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have to
wait weeks or even months to communicate with their
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loved
ones,
instead
, they can
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send
and receive messages in seconds.
Secondly
, navigation has been difficult and
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many
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people
were lost
in the
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past
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before
technology,
however
, nowadays
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people
can go anywhere they wanted using their computers or smartphones with the
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help
of Google Maps.

Finally
, computers have made education
was made
easier and more efficient. Students in the
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past
few decades had to visit multiple libraries and waste
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a lot of
time to find a book they wanted.
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Today
, they can either download books or
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purchase
them online which saves them
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a lot of
time and effort.
Furthermore
, anyone in any country with an internet connection can access thousands of online courses and learn whatever they want.
For instance
,
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people
in poor countries can take free online courses and read books as long as they have a computer and an internet connection.

In conclusion
, it is
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hard
to
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think
of any area of our
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lives
that computers and technology have not
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changed
. It is true that there are various inventions in the
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past
decade that were noteworthy,
yet
the impact of computers remains the greatest,
thus
, in my opinion, it is the most essential device humans have ever made.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS essay Computers are often argued to be the most important invention of the last hundred years. with this statement? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
299 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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