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Computers are being used more and more in education. Some people say that this is a positive trend, while others argue that it is leading to negative consequences. Discuss both sides of this argument and then give your own opinion v.25

Computers are being used more and more in education. Some people say that this is a positive trend, while others argue that it is leading to negative consequences. 25
In the modern life, computer use in learning has significantly increased. While other people think that this is a favourable development, others believe that its outcomes can only be considered as unfavourable. In this essay, I will discuss both views before coming down to my opinion. On the one hand, use of machines in schools eases burden on teachers. This is because, teachers will only give skeleton information to students and the rest they will surf it on the internet using computers, hence they will devote time to other activities. For example, learners can be given an assignment which they will submit later. If computers were not to be employed, then a considerable amount of time will be wasted. What is more, computers are fast in carrying out activities which make learning more convenient and enjoyable for learners. On the other hand, this development might be considered as disadvantageous not only because of distractions it brings but also loss of employment in the education sector. To elaborate, learners tend to get distracted when using computers, especially the internet as the myriad of information that comes out might be overwhelming, not to mention the distractions from computer games. In addition, some teachers might see themselves unemployed as computers will be performing their job. In conclusion, I opine that the effects brought by computer-based education is negative as it distracts students from learning as well as putting some teachers' jobs at stake. However, their use should be embraced, but with some regulations to counteract these effects.
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use
in learning has
significantly
increased. While
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other
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people
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think
that this is a
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favourable
development, others believe that its outcomes can
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be considered
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. In this essay, I will discuss both views
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before
coming down to my opinion.

On the one hand,
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use
of machines in schools
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eases
burden on teachers. This is
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because
, teachers will
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only
give skeleton information to students and the rest they will surf it on the internet using computers,
hence
they will devote time to
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other
activities.
For example
, learners can be
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given
an assignment which they will submit later. If computers were not to
be employed
, then a considerable amount of time will
be wasted
.
What is more
, computers are
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fast
in carrying out activities which
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make
learning more convenient and enjoyable for learners.

On the
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other
hand, this development might
be considered
as disadvantageous not
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only
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because
of distractions it brings
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but
also
loss of employment in the education sector. To elaborate, learners tend to
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get
distracted when using computers,
especially
the internet as the myriad of information that
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comes
out might be overwhelming, not to mention the distractions from computer games.
In addition
,
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some
teachers might
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see
themselves unemployed as computers will be performing their job.

In conclusion
, I opine that the effects brought by computer-based education is
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negative
as it distracts students from learning
as well
as putting
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some
teachers' jobs at stake.
However
, their
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use
should
be embraced
,
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but
with
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some
regulations to counteract these effects.
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IELTS essay Computers are being used more and more in education. Some people say that this is a positive trend, while others argue that it is leading to negative consequences. 25

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
254 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
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  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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