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Computers are being used more and more in education. Some people say that this is a positive trend, while others argue that it is leading to negative consequences. Discuss both sides of this argument and then give your own opinion. v.18

Computers are being used more and more in education. Some people say that this is a positive trend, while others argue that it is leading to negative consequences. v. 18
There has been an ever increasing use of automation, such as tablets and laptops, in the classroom. It is often argued that this is a positive development, whilst others disagree and think it will lead to adverse ramifications. This essay agrees that an increase in machinery is beneficial to students and teachers. This essay will discuss both points of view. It is clear that the internet has provided students with access to more information than ever before. Moreover, learners have the ability to research and learn about any subject at the touch of a button. It is therefore agreed that automation is a very worthwhile tool for education. For example, Wikipedia is a prime example, where students can simply type in any keyword and gain access to in-depth knowledge quickly and easily. However, many disagree and feel that machinery deprives people of real human communication. Human interaction teaches people valuable skills such as discourse, debate and empathy. Despite this, human communication is still possible through the internet and this essay disagrees machinery should be dismissed for this reason. For instance, Skype and Facebook make it possible for people to interact in ways that were never before possible. In conclusion, while the benefits of technology, particularly the internet, allow students to tap into limitless sources of information, some still feel that people should be wary of this new phenomenon and not allow it to curb face to face cooperation. However, as long as we are careful to keep in mind the importance of human synergy in education, the educational benefits are clearly positive.
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ever increasing
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use
of automation, such as tablets and laptops, in the classroom. It is
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often
argued that this is a
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positive
development, whilst others disagree and
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think
it will lead to adverse ramifications. This essay
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agrees
that an increase in machinery is beneficial to
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students
and teachers. This essay will discuss both points of view.

It is
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clear
that the internet has provided
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students
with access to more information than ever
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before
.
Moreover
, learners have the ability to research and learn about any subject at the touch of a button. It is
therefore
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agreed
that automation is a
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very
worthwhile tool for education.
For example
, Wikipedia is a prime example, where
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students
can
simply
type in any keyword and gain access to in-depth knowledge
quickly
and
easily
.

However
,
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many
disagree and feel that machinery deprives
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people
of real
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human
communication.
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Human
interaction teaches
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people
valuable
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skills
such as discourse, debate and empathy. Despite this,
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human
communication is
still
possible through the internet and this essay disagrees machinery should
be dismissed
for this reason
.
For instance
, Skype and Facebook
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make
it possible for
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people
to interact in ways that were never
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before
possible.

In conclusion
, while the benefits of technology,
particularly
the internet,
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allow
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students
to tap into limitless sources of information,
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some
still
feel that
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people
should be wary of this new phenomenon and not
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allow
it to curb face to face cooperation.
However
, as long as we are careful to
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keep
in mind the importance of
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human
synergy in education, the educational benefits are
clearly
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positive
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Computers are being used more and more in education. Some people say that this is a positive trend, while others argue that it is leading to negative consequences. v. 18

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
262 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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