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Company top-level authorities should or should not take employees suggestions or ideas to take any decisions. Discuss. v.2

Company top-level authorities should or should not take employees suggestions or ideas to take any decisions. Discuss. v. 2
Education is important for personal, social and economic development of the nation some people have a thought that all educational institutes pay more attention to theoretical subjects rather than practical skills. I concur with the statement and we discuss all my views into the upcoming paragraphs. To commence with, most of the institutes follow the conventional method of teaching which includes writing reading and learning. There is no doubt by skin method students can get high percentage with a good grade, but they will not get Good jobs, until they have not any practical skill. Job demands more practical knowledge. Moreover, Involvement of students in a practical assignment has many benefits, as they are often carried out in a group which increase the social value team spirit, sharing and cooperation in pupils. Furthermore, with the practical work students become confident and independent. As a salient example, a student who has a degree of electronics even he cannot change bulb it happens due to lack of practical skill. In addition, it is well known fact that knowledge is completed with the theory as well as a practical and the curriculum activities. Does taking this into the consideration universities and colleges should give equal proportion to both parts. For instance, when I was doing my post graduation in computer I remember there was only a one practical session in a week. Due to one lecture in a week we were unable to gain full practical knowledge. Universities do not award degrees until students cannot get practical skills. To conclude, I state that all institutes must realise the value of both aspects of education for the better future of a youngster. The topic has been discussed both sides of educational aspects.
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for personal, social and economic development of the nation
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thought
that all educational institutes pay more attention to theoretical subjects
rather
than
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practical
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skills
. I concur with the
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statement and
we discuss all my views into the upcoming paragraphs.

To commence with, most of the institutes follow the conventional method of teaching which includes writing reading and learning. There is no doubt by skin method
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students
can
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get
high percentage with a
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good
grade,
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but
they will not
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get
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Good
jobs, until they have not any
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practical
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skill
. Job demands more
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practical
knowledge.
Moreover
,

Involvement of
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students
in a
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practical
assignment has
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many
benefits, as they are
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often
carried out in a group which increase the social value team spirit, sharing and cooperation in pupils.
Furthermore
, with the
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practical
work
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students
become confident and independent. As a salient example, a
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student
who has a degree of electronics even he cannot
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change
bulb it happens due to lack of
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practical
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skill
.

In addition
, it is well known fact that knowledge
is completed
with the theory
as well
as a
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practical
and the curriculum activities.
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Does taking
this into the consideration universities and colleges should give equal proportion to both parts.
For instance
, when I was doing my post graduation in computer I remember there was
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only
a one
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practical
session in a week. Due to one lecture in a week we were unable to gain full
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practical
knowledge. Universities do not award degrees until
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students
cannot
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get
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practical
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skills
.

To conclude
, I state that all institutes
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must
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realise
the value of both aspects of education for the better future of a youngster. The topic has
been discussed
both sides of educational aspects.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Company top-level authorities should or should not take employees suggestions or ideas to take any decisions. Discuss. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
288 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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