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Companies should provide sports and social facilities for local communities. To what extent do you agree. v.9

Companies should provide sports and social facilities for local communities. v. 9
I Strongly agree with this statement. Companies should provide sports and social facilities for local communities and this essay will explore the extent to which I agree with this view. I will furthermore explain three main arguments. These include companies being the most capable to provide facilities as well as the benefit of such facilities for employees. Firstly, since companies undoubtedly have the necessary amount of revenue required to provide such facilities they are the most capable to do so. In addition, they are well suited to sustain such facilities as a result of their experience obtained from operating a company. For Example, 'fitness first' can very easily start a facility. Moreover, this means it is more likely a community can benefit from a facility run by a company as opposed to an individual because they can sustain it. For instance, a company like 'fitness first' would be in more of a capable position to provide the relevant facilities to communities than an average person. Since facilities normally require a large sum of money in order to be constructed, it is more of a responsibility to those with such funds. Furthermore, many companies retain workers to perform tasks that may be stressful or mundane. Although the companies are not obligated to provide facilities for communities, I adamantly believe that them doing so would help in the physical and social health of the people in the community. For instance, those that are employed in the computer programming sector. Companies should thus aim to build facilities in order to promote the well being of people in the community. In conclusion, companies being the most well equipped, are the most capable to provide facilities to communities in order to promote the physical and social well being. Therefore, it is clear that the idea that companies should provide sports and social facilities for local communities must be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject and for these reasons it is recommended that companies must provide such facilities to the local communities.
I
Strongly
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agree
with this statement.
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Companies
should
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provide
sports and
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social
facilities for local
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communities
and this essay will explore the extent to which I
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agree
with this view. I will
furthermore
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explain
three main arguments. These include
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companies
being the most
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capable
to
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provide
facilities as
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well
as the benefit of such facilities for employees.

Firstly
, since
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companies
undoubtedly
have the necessary amount of revenue required to
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provide
such facilities they are the most
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capable
to do
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so
.
In addition
, they are
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well
suited to sustain such facilities
as a result
of their experience obtained from operating a
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company
.
For Example
, 'fitness
first
' can
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very
easily
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start
a facility.
Moreover
, this means it is more likely a
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community
can benefit from a facility run by a
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company
as opposed to an individual
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because
they can sustain it.
For instance
, a
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company
like 'fitness
first
' would be in more of a
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capable
position to
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provide
the relevant facilities to
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communities
than an average person. Since facilities
normally
require a large sum of money in order to
be constructed
, it is more of a responsibility to those with such funds.

Furthermore
,
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many
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companies
retain workers to perform tasks that may be stressful or mundane. Although the
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companies
are not obligated to
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provide
facilities for
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communities
, I
adamantly
believe that them doing
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so
would
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help
in the physical and
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social
health of the
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people
in the
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community
.
For instance
, those that
are employed
in the computer programming sector.
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Companies
should
thus
aim to build facilities in order to promote the
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well being
of
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people
in the community.

In conclusion
,
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companies
being the most
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well equipped
, are the most
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capable
to
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provide
facilities to
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communities
in order to promote the physical and
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social
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well being
.
Therefore
, it is
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clear
that the
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idea
that
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companies
should
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provide
sports and
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social
facilities for local
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communities
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must
be supported
. After thorough analysis on this subject and for these reasons it
is recommended
that
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companies
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must
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provide
such facilities to the local
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communities
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
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IELTS essay Companies should provide sports and social facilities for local communities. v. 9

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
337 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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