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Climate change is the biggest threat to our planet. How accurate is this statement? Are there any other big threats to mankind? v.2

Climate change is the biggest threat to our planet. How accurate is this statement? Are there any other big threats to mankind? v. 2
The planet Earths enormous hazard to all society is changes of our atmospheric conditions. This statement is proven fact by many scientists and every individual can relate this issue, as years ago our weather was different, however there are other threats to our planet, as plastic which is related to climate changes all around the world. Climate change is the biggest issue on 21. Century. Scientists started to talk about it since 90’s but nobody did not took it seriously. Manufacture is our main resource and income but it is causing air pollution which leads to a temperature raises and lack of fresh air. Countries who have biggest industries released chemicals in the atmosphere which caused acid rains and green house effect. Diesel cars are used in all around the world which also caused CO2 released in air. For example China where all our products come from, don’t have fresh air anymore. People wearing masks do not inhale toxic air and buying air ballots of fresh air. Plastic is another major issue which is related to global warming. Nowadays you can buy anything which is already packed in plastic containers which leads beaches and forests full of rubbish because people are reckless and throw anything in a nature. Unfortunately this leads to animal species extinct, animals are dying when digesting plastic. In July 2019 there is event called ‘Plastic free July’ to aware people boycotting to use plastic bags, straws, coffee cups etc and use more reusable bags, their own coffee mugs and trying to use alternative ways. In conclusion global warming to our society is major problem because it is caused lack of fresh air, acid rains and temperature raise, however people can also help to improve our environment to not use plastic and find alternative usage.
The planet Earths enormous hazard to all society is
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changes
of our atmospheric

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conditions
. This statement
is proven
fact by
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many
scientists and every individual
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can


relate this issue, as years ago our weather was
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different
,
however
there are other threats

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to
our planet, as
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plastic
which
is related
to climate
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changes
all around the world.

Climate
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change
is the biggest issue on 21. Century. Scientists
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started
to talk about
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it


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since
Apostrophes aren't needed for decades: "90s".
90’s
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but
nobody did not
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took
it
seriously
. Manufacture is our main resource
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and


income
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but
it is causing
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air
pollution which leads to a temperature raises and lack of

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fresh
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air
. Countries who have
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biggest
industries released chemicals in the
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atmosphere


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which
caused acid rains and green
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house
effect. Diesel cars are
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used
in all around
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the


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world
which
also
caused CO2 released in
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air
.
For example
China where all our
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products


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come
from, don’t have fresh
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air
anymore.
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People
wearing masks do not inhale toxic
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air


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and
buying
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air
ballots of fresh air.

Plastic is another major issue which
is related
to global warming. Nowadays you can
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buy


anything which is already packed in
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plastic
containers which leads beaches and forests

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full
of rubbish
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because
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people
are reckless and throw anything in a nature. Unfortunately

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this
leads to animal species extinct, animals are dying when digesting
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plastic
. In
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July


2019 there is
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event
called
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‘Plastic
free July’ to aware
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people
boycotting to
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use
plastic

bags, straws, coffee cups etc and
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use
more reusable bags, their
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own
coffee mugs and

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trying
to
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use
alternative ways.

In conclusion
global warming to our society is major problem
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because
it
is caused
lack of

fresh
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air
, acid rains and temperature raise,
however
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people
can
also
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help
to
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improve
our

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environment
to not
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use
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plastic
and find alternative usage.
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
24Mistakes

IELTS essay Climate change is the biggest threat to our planet. How accurate is this statement? Are there any other big threats to mankind? v. 2

Essay
  American English
22 paragraphs
298 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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