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climate change is now accepted threat to our planet, but there are other threat also. Do you agree or disagree v.1

climate change is now accepted threat to our planet, but there are other threat also. v. 1
Some people believe that the significant threat that faces our planet nowadays is climate change. This essay agrees with this statement because lands may lost habitats due to a continued rise in the level of seawater. The other threat to earth and humans would be terrorism. One of the significant consequences of climate change on our planet is the rise of the seawater level. This is because global warming, due to the effect of environmental pollution, caused the melting of the glaciers. The water from these melting ices goes to the nearby rivers, lakes, and seas. As a result, the level of seawater has risen, and many lands lost their habitats. For example, The New York Times recently reported that, in the north of Canada, melting of one of its biggest glaciers and diverting its water to the rivers caused many damages to the nearby villages and their dwellers. Apart from climate change, terrorism is another threat that faces humanity at present, because every place around the world is vulnerable to their actions. Every day, many people lose their lives as a result of their attacks. They target all kinds of people, including children and the disabled. Their agenda is to spread hatred and fear among people. According to a survey conducted by UNISCO, in 2016, 2 million people died, and more than 10 million lost their homes because of terrorism attacks. In conclusion, I think that the elevation of the water level in the seas as a consequence of climate change is one of the biggest threats to the planet, and terrorism is another global problem that endangers the lives of human beings in the world.
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Some
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believe that the significant
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threat
that faces our planet nowadays is
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climate
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change
. This essay
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agrees
with this statement
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because
lands may lost habitats due to a continued rise in the
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level
of seawater. The other
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threat
to earth and humans would be terrorism.

One of the significant consequences of
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climate
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change
on our planet is the rise of the seawater
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level
. This is
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because
global warming, due to the effect of environmental pollution, caused the melting of the glaciers. The water from these melting ices goes to the nearby rivers, lakes, and seas.
As a result
, the
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level
of seawater has risen, and
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many
lands lost their habitats.
For example
, The New York Times recently reported that, in the north of Canada, melting of one of its biggest glaciers and diverting its water to the rivers caused
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many
damages to the nearby villages and their dwellers.

Apart from
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climate
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change
, terrorism is another
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threat
that faces humanity at present,
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because
every place around the world is vulnerable to their actions. Every day,
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many
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people
lose their
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lives
as a result
of their attacks. They target all kinds of
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people
, including children and the disabled. Their agenda is to spread hatred and fear among
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people
. According to a survey conducted by
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UNISCO
, in 2016, 2 million
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people
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died
, and more than 10 million lost their homes
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because
of terrorism attacks.

In conclusion
, I
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think
that the elevation of the water
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level
in the seas as a consequence of
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climate
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change
is one of the biggest
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threats
to the planet, and terrorism is another global problem that endangers the
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lives
of human beings in the world.
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IELTS essay climate change is now accepted threat to our planet, but there are other threat also. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
277 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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