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Classroom education is more helpful in life than lessons learned at home. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Use specific examples and reasons for your answer. v.2

Classroom education is more helpful in life than lessons learned at home. Use specific examples and reasons for your answer. v. 2
Learning is a life-long process. We never stop learning, even when we are old. And the sources of learning are endless – we do not just learn from books or experts. We can also learn from experiences, our own experiments, and others. Some people believe that children learn in school is more useful than they learn at the house. However, I strongly believe that the lesson which we learn at home are more useful. Children learn basics and important lessons at home such as discipline, respect, and self-confidence. First, respect is a basic gesture which everyone uses in life. If there is basic human respect, so many other good character traits follow suit. Respect for authority also shows obedience. Respect for others covers kindness. Respect for oneself shows self-control and self-worth. Things like teasing and bullying happen in the absence of respect. Backtalk, disobedience, laziness, same thing, they just don' t exist where respect is found. For example, my niece, Diya is a very nice kid. Diya’s teacher says that she is very obedient in class. This credit goes to my sister, she always teaches her lesson on respect others and what is the importance of it. Second, at home parents can teach children that failure does not mean that you are not good that subject. Failure means you are being directed into another step towards success. Life is always a struggle, and one has to stumble in life for simple reasons that we have to face many hurdles. Failures could disappoint and discourage us however, the right approach to failure doesn' t have to dishearten. Instead, we should learn lessons from those failures. For example, my niece, Diya failed in the dancing competition that time she was so discouraged. AT that time my sister asked her favorite board game with her. Diya played that game and she also won that game. My sister explained to her that when you participate in such competition then only one wins, and others lose. That does not mean that they are bad in those skills, but they have to improve their skill to make it better. Lastly, discipline is a lifelong skill that helps children to become successful from academics, to jobs and to families of their own. Without discipline, accomplishment could be hard to achieve, while with discipline we can achieve security and success. For example, I grew up well-disciplined by my Dad. My dad used to spoil us with treats once in a while too, but he was really more of a strict disciplinarian. I' d like to believe that his military training has something to do with how firm he was with " the law of the household" and he and my Mom would set a consistent routine that reinforces self-discipline. I used to wake up on time and also help my mom for house chores. It helped in the future when I was away from my house for graduate study. In conclusion, based on my experiences, I strongly believe that lesson learn at home are more useful for life that which we learn from books at school. At home, children learn discipline, respect, and self-confidence.
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in school is more useful than they
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learn
at home are more useful.
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Children
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basics and
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lessons
at home such as
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discipline
,
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respect
, and self-confidence.

First
,
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respect
is a basic gesture which everyone
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uses
in
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life
. If there is basic human
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respect
,
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character traits follow suit.
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for authority
also
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shows
obedience.
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Respect
for others covers kindness.
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Respect
for oneself
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shows
self-control and self-worth. Things like teasing and bullying happen in the absence of
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respect
. Backtalk, disobedience, laziness, same thing, they
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just
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is found
.
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Diya
is a
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very
nice kid.
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Diya
’s teacher says that she is
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obedient in
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class
. This credit goes to my sister, she always teaches her
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lesson
on
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respect
others and what is the importance of it.

Second, at home parents can teach
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children
that
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failure
does not mean that you are not
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good
that subject.
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Failure
means you are
being directed
into another step towards success.
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Life
is always a struggle, and one
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has to
stumble in
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life
for simple reasons that we
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face
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hurdles.
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Failures
could disappoint and discourage us
however
, the right approach to
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doesn&
#039; t
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dishearten.
Instead
, we should
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lessons
from those
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failures
.
For example
, my niece,
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Diya
failed in the dancing competition that time she was
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discouraged. AT that time my sister asked her favorite board game with her.
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Diya
played that game and she
also
won that game. My sister
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explained
to her that when you participate in such competition then
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one wins,
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and others
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skills
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Lastly
,
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discipline
is a lifelong
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skill
that
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helps
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children
to become successful from academics, to jobs and to families of their
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own
. Without
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discipline
, accomplishment could be
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hard
to achieve, while with
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discipline
we can achieve security and success.
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, I grew up well-disciplined by my Dad. My dad
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used
to spoil us with treats once in a while too,
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he was
really
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that his military training has something to do with how firm he was with
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; the law of the
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household&quot
; and he and my Mom would set a consistent routine that reinforces self-discipline. I
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to wake up on time and
also
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help
my mom for
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chores. It
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helped
in the future when I was away from my
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house
for graduate study.

In conclusion
, based on my experiences, I
strongly
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believe
that
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lesson
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learn
at home are more useful for
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life
that which we
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learn
from books at school. At home,
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children
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learn
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discipline
,
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respect
, and self-confidence.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
49Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
12Mistakes
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IELTS essay Classroom education is more helpful in life than lessons learned at home. Use specific examples and reasons for your answer. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
526 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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