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1. Choose one of the following transportation vehicles and explain why you think it has changed people’s lives: automobilesbicycles airplanes Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.2

1. Choose one of the following transportation vehicles and explain why you think it has changed people’s lives: automobilesbicycles airplanes Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 2
Today there is no shortage of debate that car is the best vehicle of all, because it contains a lot of features which facilitate our life. But, a large number of people have opposite point of view and they believe that bicycle has more advantages than car or bus. Moreover, I totally agree with this point of view and I feel this way for some reasons. Firstly, if all people use the bicycle as a vehicle, we will save our planet. It is common knowledge that people experience a lot of environmental problems in the twenty-first century and the most dangerous one is air pollution. It is happening because there are a large quantity of cars, which emit exhaust gases. Furthermore, those gases are able to destroy ozone layer, which is an extremely vital for people`s life. But, people are able to avoid this issue, if they will use bicycle, because this sort of vehicle is environmental friendly. So, it was a first benefit of bicycle. Secondly, people will become healthier, if they change their cars on bicycle. It goes without say that a lot of people lead a sedentary life style due to their work. In addition, this kind of life style is able to lead to serious health problems, for example, obesity or even heart attack. According to the statistic, every third person in US is suffer from those diseases. But, I strongly convinced that people`s life will be better, when they start to use bicycles, because they will do some types of physical exercise, during their way to home. Finally, people will save a lot of money on bicycle. It is definitely true that all new cars are an extremely expensive, so not all people are able to buy it. Also, there are a large number forfeits and annual fees for car, which are also costly. So, it will be unbearable sum for some people. But if people buy bicycles, they will avoid those unexpected fees. Moreover, people reduce traffic jams, so their commute time will decrease dramatically. By the way of conclusion, based on the argument explored above, it goes without say that bicycle is a perfect vehicle of all, which I able to make our lives healthier and better.
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Today
there is no shortage of debate that
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car
is the best
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vehicle
of all,
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because
it contains a
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lot
of features which facilitate our
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life
.
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But
,
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a large number of
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people
have opposite point of
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view and
they believe that
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bicycle
has more advantages than
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car
or bus.
Moreover
, I
totally
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agree
with this point of view and I feel this way for
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some
reasons.

Firstly
, if all
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people
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use
the
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bicycle
as a
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vehicle
, we will save our planet. It is common knowledge that
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people
experience a
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lot
of environmental problems in the twenty-
first
century and the most
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dangerous
one is air pollution. It is happening
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because
there are a large quantity of
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cars
, which emit exhaust gases.
Furthermore
, those gases are
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able
to
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destroy
ozone layer, which is an
extremely
vital for
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people`s
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life
.
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But
,
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people
are
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able
to avoid this issue, if they will
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use
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bicycle
,
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because
this sort of
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vehicle
is environmental friendly.
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So
, it was a
first
benefit of bicycle.

Secondly
,
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people
will become healthier, if they
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change
their
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cars
on
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bicycle
. It goes without say that a
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lot
of
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people
lead a sedentary
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life
style due to their work.
In addition
, this kind of
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life
style is
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able
to lead to serious health problems,
for example
, obesity or even heart attack. According to the statistic, every third person in US is
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suffer
from those diseases.
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But
, I
strongly
convinced that
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people`s
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life
will be better, when they
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start
to
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use
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bicycles
,
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because
they will do
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some
types of physical exercise, during their way to home.

Finally
,
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people
will save a
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lot
of money on
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bicycle
. It is definitely true that all new
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cars
are an
extremely
expensive,
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so
not all
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people
are
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able
to
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buy
it.
Also
, there are a large number forfeits and annual fees for
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car
, which are
also
costly.
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, it will be unbearable sum for
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some
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people
.
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if
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people
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buy
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bicycles
, they will avoid those unexpected fees.
Moreover
,
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people
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reduce
traffic jams,
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so
their commute time will decrease
dramatically
.

By the way of conclusion, based on the argument explored above, it goes without say that
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bicycle
is a perfect
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vehicle
of all, which
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I
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able
to
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make
our
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lives
healthier and better.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
45Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay 1. Choose one of the following transportation vehicles and explain why you think it has changed people’s lives: automobilesbicycles airplanes Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
374 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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