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Choose oneof the following transportation vehicles and explain why you think it has changed people’s lives. a)automobilesb)bicyclesc)airplanesUse specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.2

Choose oneof the following transportation vehicles and explain why you think it has changed people’s lives. a)automobilesb)bicyclesc)airplanesUse specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 2
Transpotation is important for us as human being. Transportation is changed world wide and we have different methods of transportation nowadays in world. I agree with bicycle as a convenient method of transportation because of the following reasons. First of all, it is more convenient for all kinds of people even poor people can buy a bike in order to commute. We need the method of transportation to buy whatever we need from distant places and bring it home. For example, we bought so much groceries, so many fruits we need to move them to home in orther to consume. Moreover, we need this to go to work for instance. When your work is one hour away from your home it will take an hour to walk if you do not drive a bike. For example, when I drive bike to my workplace it will save half an hour of my time. Furthermore, bike will help people' s fitness. It helps people' s shape so we don' t have any obese people in community anymore. Obesity is one of the most important problems that human being is having. People dye from diabetes, High blood lipid, Heart attack, High blood pressure because they don' t exercise. Nowadays motor vehicle is too popular. In order to reduce it in community we recommend people take a bike instead of motor vehicle. Nowadays traffic is so heavy that we recommend people to escape from this traffic by riding a bike. In summary, I believe that bike is the most efficacious mode of transportation in comparison with automobile and airplane.
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Transpotation
is
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important
for us as human being.
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Transportation
is
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changed
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world wide
and we have
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different
methods of
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transportation
nowadays in world. I
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agree
with bicycle as a convenient method of
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transportation
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because
of the following reasons.

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, it is more convenient for all kinds of
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people
even poor
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people
can
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buy
a
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bike
in order to commute. We
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need
the method of
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transportation
to
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buy
whatever we
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need
from distant places and bring it home.
For example
, we
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bought
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so
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much
groceries,
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so
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many
fruits we
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need
to
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move
them to home in
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orther
to consume.

Moreover
, we
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need
this to go to work
for instance
. When your work is one hour away from your home it will take an hour to walk if you do not drive a
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bike
.
For example
, when I drive
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bike
to my workplace it will save half an hour of my time.

Furthermore
,
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bike
will
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help
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people&
#039; s fitness. It
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helps
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people&
#039; s shape
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so
we
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don&
#039; t have any obese
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people
in community anymore. Obesity is one of the most
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important
problems that human being is having.
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People
dye from diabetes, High blood lipid, Heart attack, High blood pressure
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because
they
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don&
#039; t exercise.

Nowadays motor vehicle is too popular. In order to
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reduce
it in community we recommend
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people
take a
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bike
instead
of motor vehicle. Nowadays traffic is
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so
heavy that we recommend
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people
to escape from this traffic by riding a bike.

In summary, I believe that
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bike
is the most efficacious mode of
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transportation
in comparison
with automobile and airplane.
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23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Mistakes

IELTS essay Choose oneof the following transportation vehicles and explain why you think it has changed people’s lives. a)automobilesb)bicyclesc)airplanesUse specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 2

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
265 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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