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Choose one of the following transportation vehicles and explain whyyou think it has changed people’s lives. • automobiles• bicycles• airplanesUse specific reasons and examples to support your answer v.2

Choose one of the following transportation vehicles and explain whyyou think it has changed people’s lives. • automobiles• bicycles• airplanesUse specific reasons and examples to support your answer v. 2
Transportation is one of the most important innovation in modern world, it enable the world to be connected at so many levels. Personally I assert that transportation through automobiles dramatically change people’s lives. First of all, cars make our lives much easier. Nowadays it is so accessible to commute to work and back to home using our own cars. That effect the job market significantly increase jobs and employee as well. Cars also enhance our safety in living in remote places in case of emergency, simply dial 911 both a police and an emergency car will be at your door. Car seats was an important additions to cars, it allow mother' s to move around with their infants or toddlers being safe and taking care of. For example in Iraq people do not have access to car seats that prevent woman from running errands or even visiting a friend, mothers of infants and toddlers usually stay at home all the time to ensure their babies safety. On the other hand some might argue that cars cause a lot of fatal accidents, in fact it’s the people how are responsible for those accidents by not paying attention to the roads. Simply, if there were no cars, people would be isolated and live would be much harder. Another reason cars are of a significant value for a certain society’s economy, they enable the transportation of crops and goods from farms to urban cities. This enhance live quality for both rural and urban cities, create more job, and provide fresh food to the cities. If there were no cars, people would had to grow their own crops wherever they live, which could be inconvenient in our modern world. Although some might argue that cars invention has a lot of disadvantages like disease been transported with infected people, this would be also possible if no cars were in use. Beyond all doubts cars allow economy to thrive much faster. To sum up, all of automobiles, bicycles and airplanes effect the way people live, but for most automobile has the more valuable effect. Cars enhance both life quality and a society economy. Could you imagine you’re live without a using a car?
Transportation is one of the most
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important
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innovation
in modern world, it
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enable
the world to
be connected
at
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so
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many
levels.
Personally
I assert that transportation through automobiles
dramatically
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change
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people’s
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lives
.

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First of all
,
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cars
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make
our
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lives
much easier. Nowadays it is
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so
accessible to commute to work and back to home using our
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own
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cars
. That effect the job market
significantly
increase jobs and employee
as well
.
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Cars
also
enhance our safety in living in remote places in case of emergency,
simply
dial 911 both a police and an emergency
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car
will be at your door.
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Car
seats was an
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important
Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean "addition"?
additions
to
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cars
, it
Did you mean "allows"?
allow
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mother&
#039; s to
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move
around with their infants or toddlers being safe and taking care of.
For example
in Iraq
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people
do not have access to
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car
seats that
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prevent
woman from running errands or even visiting a friend, mothers of infants and toddlers
usually
stay at home all the time to ensure their babies safety.
On the other hand
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some
might argue that
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cars
cause
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a lot of
fatal accidents, in fact it’s the
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people
how are responsible for those accidents by not paying attention to the roads.
Simply
, if there were no
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cars
,
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people
would
be isolated
and
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live
would be much harder.

Another reason
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cars
are of a significant value for a certain society’s economy, they enable the transportation of crops and
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goods
from farms to urban cities.
The verb 'enhance' is plural. Did you mean: "This enhances"? Did you use a verb instead of a noun?
This enhance
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live
quality for both rural and urban cities, create more job, and provide fresh food to the cities. If there were no
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cars
,
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people
would
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had
to grow their
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own
crops wherever they
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live
, which could be inconvenient in our modern world. Although
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some
might argue that
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cars
invention has
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a lot of
disadvantages like disease
been transported
with infected
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people
, this would be
also
possible if no
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cars
were in
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use
. Beyond all doubts
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cars
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allow
economy to thrive much faster.

To sum up,
Consider using "all automobiles" or "all of the automobiles".
all of automobiles
, bicycles and airplanes effect the way
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people
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live
,
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but
for most automobile has the more valuable effect.
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Cars
enhance both life quality and a society economy. Could you imagine you’re
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live
without a using a
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car
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7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
29Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Mistakes

IELTS essay Choose one of the following transportation vehicles and explain whyyou think it has changed people’s lives. • automobiles• bicycles• airplanesUse specific reasons and examples to support your answer v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
367 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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