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Choose one of the following transportation vehicles and explain why you think it has changed people's lives. <br><br> Automobiles, bicycles, airplanes. v.1

Choose one of the following transportation vehicles and explain why you think it has changed people's lives. <br><br> Automobiles, bicycles, airplanes. v. 1
It is believed that the invention of airplanes has changed the way people travel these days. For a number of reasons, this mode of transportation has brought positive aspects in our lives, and the following essay will discuss them in details. Firstly, it is undeniable that with the existence of aeroplanes, people could travel to another country or continent in such a shorter time. With this advanced technology, people could save more time and be more productive. For instance, with the existence of Concorde supersonic airplanes, people could travel from London to New York in just several hours, and once they arrive at their destination point, they could do a lot of things there from sightseeing, shopping up to the business meeting. Secondly, airplanes have positively affected the development of tourism sectors. Nowadays, there are a lot of low-cost airlines, such as Tiger Air, Value Air, Jet Star and AirAsia which sell their tickets at affordable rates. As a result, more people are doing travel activities these days, and they boost the tourism industries. More resorts and hotels are being built in the tourist destination places and it has created a lot of job opportunities for the local people. In conclusion, it is a fact that airplanes play a significant role in people's live these days, as they bring a lot of benefits for many people. Some of the benefits of airplanes are that it could shorten the travelling time, therefore people could manage more of their time. And then, with the existence of airplanes, it has affected the tourism industry as it has created a lot of employment for the local people.
It
is believed
that the invention of
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airplanes
has
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changed
the way
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people
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travel
these days. For a number of reasons, this mode of transportation has brought
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positive
aspects in our
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lives
, and the following essay will discuss them in
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details
.

Firstly
, it is undeniable that with the existence of
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aeroplanes
,
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people
could
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travel
to another country or continent in such a shorter
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time
. With this advanced technology,
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people
could save more
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time
and be more productive.
For instance
, with the existence of Concorde supersonic
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airplanes
,
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people
could
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travel
from London to New York in
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just
several hours, and once they arrive at their destination point, they could do a
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lot
of things there from sightseeing, shopping up to the business meeting.

Secondly
,
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airplanes
have
positively
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affected
the development of tourism sectors. Nowadays, there are a
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lot
of low-cost airlines, such as Tiger Air, Value Air, Jet Star and
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AirAsia
which sell their tickets at affordable rates.
As a result
, more
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people
are doing
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travel
activities these days, and they boost the tourism industries. More resorts and hotels are
being built
in the tourist destination places and it has created a
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lot
of job opportunities for the local
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people
.

In conclusion
, it is a fact that
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airplanes
play a significant role in
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people
's
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live
these days, as they bring a
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lot
of benefits for
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many
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people
.
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Some of the
benefits of
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airplanes
are that it could shorten the travelling
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time
,
therefore
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people
could manage more of their
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time
. And then, with the existence of
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airplanes
, it has
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affected
the tourism industry as it has created a
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lot
of employment for the local
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people
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Choose one of the following transportation vehicles and explain why you think it has changed people's lives. <br><br> Automobiles, bicycles, airplanes. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
273 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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