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Children should be required to help with household tasks as soon as they are able to do so. v.4

Children should be required to help with household tasks as soon as they are able to do so. v. 4
Since the dawn of time children helped to do home tasks, but nowadays this situation has been changed and all housework are done by elders. People believe that children must help to do housework, due to the responsibility that they might earn and school themselves to work in a group. I totally agree with the rubric above and it will be proven in the following essay. Firstly, house works aren't purposed only for one person, it should be divided. For instance, if a mom would wash clothes, a daughter should run the vacuum cleaner, while the son throws away garbage. In this case, people in a family will learn how to work in a group and realise if they will do housework together it would be much easier than doing it alone. It's obvious from my example that as more people involve in cleaning of the house as faster it would be done. Another advantage of "little helpers" is that, by giving them tasks you accidentally teaching them to responsibility. For example, if children help in household works, they will use to do tasks in time and in the near future it'll be a huge advantage for them. Because, in today's life punctual people are more reliable and accepted in high positions, it is always a good idea to grow up children in this fashion. In conclusion, in my view, even if our society is changing the behaviour of the young generation, we have to teach them to help us in household works and by doing those, they actually will learn what is the responsibility and how difficult to be in charge of something.
Since the dawn of time
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children
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helped
to do home tasks,
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nowadays this situation has been
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changed
and all housework
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believe that
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children
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must
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help
to do housework, due to the responsibility that they might earn and school themselves to
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work
in a group. I
totally
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agree
with the rubric above and it will
be proven
in the following essay.

Firstly
,
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house
works aren't purposed
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only
for one person, it should
be divided
.
For instance
, if a mom would wash clothes, a daughter should run the vacuum cleaner, while the son throws away garbage.
In this case
,
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people
in a family will learn how to
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work
in a group and
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realise
if they will do housework together it would be much easier than doing it alone. It's obvious from my example that as more
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people
involve in cleaning of the
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house
as faster it would
be done
.

Another advantage of
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helpers
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is that, by giving them tasks you
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teaching them to responsibility.
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, if
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children
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help
in household works, they will
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use
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to do
tasks in time and in the near future it'll be a huge advantage for them.
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Because
, in
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today
's life punctual
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people
are more reliable and
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accepted
in high positions, it is always a
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good
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idea
to grow up
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children
in this fashion.

In conclusion
, in my view, even if our society is changing the
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behaviour
of the young generation, we
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have to
teach them to
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help
us in household works and by doing those, they actually will learn what is the responsibility and how difficult to be in charge of something.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
10Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay Children should be required to help with household tasks as soon as they are able to do so. v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
274 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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