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Children have responsibility to take care of their old family members, but some people say that oldpeople should not need to live with their families. What is your opinion? v.1

Children have responsibility to take care of their old family members, but some people say that oldpeople should not need to live with their families. What is your opinion? v. 1
The life structure of a human being is that at some point they must people to take care of them and at some points they need to help others. I have shared certain points about whether or not children should take care of old family. Firstly, any kid a support is required to grow up, this support reduces as and when the kid grows up, but there would be time where they will have to return the support and it would be abominable if that youngster abdicates towards old family member. Being a kid our day to day activities was repeatedly trained by our elders with patient, we need to give it back to them. For Instance, my friend was brought-up by his grandparents and he feels responsible to take care of them. My point being for the view is that his duty towards his grandparents is justified. Secondly, despite some people feel that old family members need not live with family, they posses morals which is required for younger generations. I believe that life is a circle and that we can also become old, what we do will happen to us. We should set examples for our future generation by showing them that we take care of our elders, In this way we take care of our future by taking care of our elders. One Incidence is that when my father was angry at my grandfather for an unknown reason to me, I too was angry at him as I stereotyped his thought process. I reassessed my thinking towards people and decided not to separate older family members for any particular issues. To sum up life of children and old family member is intertwined and if people are kept aside because of old age, it would be inhumane and that it should be avoided.
The life structure of a human being is that at
some
point they
must
people
to take
care
of them

and
at
some
points they need to
help
others. I have shared certain points about
whether or not


children
should take
care
of
old
family.

Firstly
, any kid a support
is required
to grow up, this support
reduces
as and when the kid grows up,

but
there would be
time where
they will
have to
return the support and it would be abominable if

that
youngster abdicates towards
old
family
member
. Being a kid our
day to day
activities
was


repeatedly
trained by our elders with patient, we need to give it back to them.
For Instance
,
my


friend
was brought
-up by his
grandparents and
he feels responsible to take
care
of them. My
point


being
for the view is that his duty towards his grandparents
is justified
.

Secondly
, despite
some
people
feel that
old
family
members
need not
live
with
family
,
they posses


morals
which
is required
for younger generations. I believe that life is a circle and that we can
also


become
old
, what we do will happen to us. We should set examples for our future generation
by


showing them that we take
care
of our elders, In this way we take
care
of our future by taking care

of
our elders. One Incidence is that when my father was angry at my grandfather for an
unknown


reason
to me, I too was angry at him as I stereotyped his
thought
process. I reassessed my
thinking


towards
people
and decided not to separate older
family
members
for any particular issues.

To sum up life of children and
old
family
member
is intertwined
and if
people
are
kept
aside
because


of
old
age, it would be inhumane and that it should
be avoided
.
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IELTS essay Children have responsibility to take care of their old family members, but some people say that oldpeople should not need to live with their families. What is your opinion? v. 1

Essay
  American English
18 paragraphs
305 words
5.5
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