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Children do not respect their parents as much as they did in the past This behaviour is now having a negative impact on society Discuss v.2

Children do not respect their parents as much as they did in the past This behaviour is now having a negative impact on society Discuss v. 2
With the increase in mordernisation of our society and exposure of kids to technology and internet, many parents have been complaining about change in behavior of children toward' s them. The moment kids start going to colleges or even jr. colleges, they expect full freedom from their families and want to live life on their own terms. This results in children disobeying their parents and thinking of them as their enemies. The question here arises, why does this happen? The parents obviously want their children to be self dependent and confident and they are ready to give their kids whatever they want. However, youngsters specially teenagers do not like interference in any matter from their parents. When kids watch TV shows or movies where teenagers are shown having independent lifestyles and are portrayed as heroes and heroines, they see them as their idols and want to mimic them. And when they face any objection from their parents, they see this as a way of blocking their freedom. Thus they start disrespecting and neglecting their parents. Such behaviour from kids is actually creating differences within families and is dangerous to society. Teenage is a period where an individual feel' s that he/she has already grown up and is ready to take on the world. In such situations, sometimes the person take' s a wrong step and that brings harm not only to oneself but to family as well. At times just out of curiosity or to prove a point, youngsters indulge in activities like drug abuse and sexual crimes. Today we see a number of such crimes being executed by youngsters. It is very important to understand the psychology of teenagers and it' s the responsibility of parents to keep a check on what their kids are being exposed to. Many psychologists have suggested that it' s best to be a friend to your children rather than being a parent then they are in teenage. Providing advise and suggestions in a friendly manner goes a long way in making them understand the good and bad. Children can also be encouraged from a very young age to read the biographies of great people so that it has a positive influence from their stories. Last but not the least, elders should try to set an example for their young one' s by showing them how to respect and love parents. As it is rightly said, “as you bow, so shall you reap”.
With the increase in
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mordernisation
of our society and exposure of
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kids
to technology and internet,
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many
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parents
have been complaining about
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change
in behavior of
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children
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toward&
#039; s them. The moment
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kids
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start
going to colleges or even jr. colleges, they
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expect
full freedom from their families and
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want
to
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live
life on their
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own
terms. This results in
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children
disobeying their
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parents
and thinking of them as their enemies.

The question here arises, why does this happen? The
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parents
obviously
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want
their
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children
to be self dependent and
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confident and
they are ready to give their
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kids
whatever they
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want
.
However
, youngsters
specially
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teenagers
do not like interference in any matter from their
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parents
. When
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kids
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watch
TV
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shows
or movies where
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teenagers
are shown
having independent lifestyles and
are portrayed
as heroes and heroines, they
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see
them as their idols and
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want
to mimic them. And when they face any objection from their
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parents
, they
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see
this as a way of blocking their freedom.
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Thus
they
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start
disrespecting and neglecting their parents.

Such
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behaviour
from
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kids
is actually creating differences within families and is
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dangerous
to society. Teenage is a period where an individual
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feel&
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sometimes
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wrong
step and that brings harm not
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only
to oneself
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to family
as well
. At times
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just
out of curiosity or to prove a point, youngsters indulge in activities like drug abuse and sexual crimes.
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Today
we
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see
a number of such crimes
being executed
by youngsters.

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important
to understand the psychology of
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teenagers
and
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it&
#039; s the responsibility of
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parents
to
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keep
a
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check
on what their
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kids
are
being exposed
to.
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Many
psychologists have suggested that
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it&
#039; s best to be a friend to your
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children
rather
than being a
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parent
then they are in teenage. Providing advise and suggestions
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in a friendly manner
goes a long way in making them understand the
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good
and
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bad
.
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Children
can
also
be encouraged
from a
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very
young age to read the biographies of great
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people
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so
that it has a
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positive
influence from their stories.

Last
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not the least, elders should try to set an example for their young
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one&
#039; s by showing them how to respect and
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love
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parents
. As it is
rightly
said, “as you bow,
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so
shall you reap”.
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23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Children do not respect their parents as much as they did in the past This behaviour is now having a negative impact on society Discuss v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
409 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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