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Childcare is important. Some people think that parents should require child training courses. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Childcare is important. Some people think that parents should require child training courses. v. 1
There is no doubt that success in education most likely to based on memorising. The question is, is memorization is the most prominent way to succeed? In this essay, I am going to discuss my opinion about this statement and draw my conclusion. In terms of problems, most people memorising in many situations, including education which is the main point to get a high grade. The main reason given to support this claim is that people rely on their brain most of the time not only to memorize when it comes to studying. To illustrate, teachers always tried to have the attention from students, to carefully make these students focused on. In other specific words, gifted students do their best to remember classes information more than spending lots of time studying at home. Thus, it depends on the student mode of studying, which what they can choose from many options, not memories specifically. However, memorization in common is a prominent thing for sure, which naturally increase the countless number of your brain's ability for practical purposes, but it is not necessary for all of the things. As a specific example, when I was in 12th grade, there was word competition, which was about founding 3 synonyms of the same word. Hence, memories are useful for many reasons, but not always, to succeed you should do your best. In conclusion, although it is said that memorizing in an important part of educational systems. Therefore, I believe that there are many ways to success educationally especially hard studying.
There is no doubt that success in education most likely to based on
Possible spelling mistake. 'memorising' is British English.
memorising
. The question is, is memorization is the most prominent way to succeed? In this essay, I am going to discuss my opinion about this statement and draw my conclusion.

In terms of problems, most
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people
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memorising
in
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many
situations, including education which is the main point to
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get
a high grade. The main reason
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given
to support this claim is that
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people
rely on their brain most of the time not
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only
to
Do not mix variants of the same word ('memorize' and 'memorise') within a single text.
memorize
when it
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comes
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
studying
. To illustrate, teachers always tried to have the attention from
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students
, to
carefully
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make
these
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students
focused on. In other specific words, gifted
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students
do their best to remember classes information more than spending lots of time
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
studying
at home.
Thus
, it depends on the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
student
mode of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
studying
, which what they can choose from
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
options, not memories
specifically
.

However
, memorization in common is a prominent thing for sure, which
naturally
increase the countless number of your brain's ability for practical purposes,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
it is not necessary for
Consider using "all the".
all of the
things. As a specific example, when I was in 12th grade, there was word competition, which was about founding 3 synonyms of the same word.
Hence
, memories are useful for
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
reasons,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
not always, to succeed you should do your best.

In conclusion
, although it
is said
that
Do not mix variants of the same word ('memorize' and 'memorise') within a single text.
memorizing
in an
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
part of educational systems.
Therefore
, I believe that there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
ways to success
educationally
especially
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
studying
.
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7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Childcare is important. Some people think that parents should require child training courses. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
256 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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