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Chigozie Ogbonna: Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages? v.1

Chigozie Ogbonna: Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages? v. 1
In the present world, with the advancement of technology online shopping is becoming more popular. The Internet offers a wide range of services from shopping, food ordering, and books etc. Websites like Amazon and Bookingcom provide great deals to attract customers. However, there are both pros and cons of shopping online. In this essay, I will discuss some positives of shopping online and challenges to be overcome. Let's begin by looking at the advantages of online shopping. Firstly, customers can shop from home. What I mean by this is that, instead of going out to shop, these websites offer images of the product and allows people to select any item making their life easy. For example, Flipkart an Indian based online giant helps people with a variety of products to choose. Moreover, this model of shopping saves time for busy people, allowing them to shop while they travel or eat. Secondly, There are great deals available online, compared to shops. People have an option to choose a product from two different websites without hassle for comparison, they also offer huge discounts throughout the year. For instance, people search for air tickets from different online areas and choose the one with great profit. Additionally, stores like Big Basket offer fresh fruit and vegetable delivery services, reducing the customer's burden to hand-pick them from an outside store. Turning on to the other side of the argument, sometimes products can be cheap or not-value for money like bad quality material used for clothing or selling frozen products. This has made many consumers leave internet for buying things, and also while ordering heavy products like Television sets or Washing machines there can be rough delivery issues sometimes. Furthermore, Credit fraud is a major concern for online shoppers, there are many fraud transactions going round the internet, like phishing webpages and replacing the payment page with the wrong web page. Additionally, there are many cases of utilizing customer's data like phone numbers for wrong purposes. Finally, false advertisements attract people for buying fake or expired products, making the way for traditional shopping. In conclusion, although internet scams, shopping online will be very enjoyable and satisfying because it allows people to hand-pick products from interested quantities and qualities. People should weigh the positives like saving money, home shopping, and so on and the negatives like online fraud before choosing the better shopping option. Personally, I believe that benefit in the form of comparing products from different websites outweighs all other disadvantages.
In the present world, with the advancement of technology
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online
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shopping
is becoming more popular. The Internet
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offers
a wide range of services from
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shopping
, food ordering, and books etc. Websites like Amazon and
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Bookingcom
provide great deals to attract customers.
However
, there are both pros and cons of
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shopping
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online
. In this essay, I will discuss
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some
positives of
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shopping
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online
and challenges to
be overcome
.

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's
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begin
by looking at the advantages of
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online
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shopping
.
Firstly
, customers can
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shop
from home. What I mean by this is that,
instead
of going out to
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shop
, these websites
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offer
images of the
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product
and
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allows
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people
to select any item making their life easy.
For example
, Flipkart an Indian based
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online
giant
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helps
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people
with a variety of
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products
to choose.
Moreover
, this model of
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shopping
saves time for busy
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people
, allowing them to
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shop
while they travel or eat.

Secondly
, There are great deals available
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online
, compared to
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shops
.
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People
have an option to choose a
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product
from two
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different
websites without hassle for comparison, they
also
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offer
huge discounts throughout the year.
For instance
,
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people
search for air tickets from
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different
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online
areas and choose the one with great profit.
Additionally
, stores like
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Big
Basket
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offer
fresh fruit and vegetable delivery services, reducing the customer's burden to hand-pick them from an outside store.

Turning on to the other side of the argument,
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sometimes
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products
can be
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cheap
or not-value for money like
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bad
quality material
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used
for clothing or selling frozen
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products
. This has made
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many
consumers
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leave
internet for buying things, and
also
while ordering heavy
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products
like Television sets or Washing machines there can be rough delivery issues
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sometimes
.
Furthermore
, Credit fraud is a major concern for
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online
shoppers, there are
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many
fraud transactions going round the internet, like phishing
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webpages
and replacing the payment page with the
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wrong
web page.
Additionally
, there are
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many
cases of utilizing customer's data like phone numbers for
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wrong
purposes.
Finally
, false advertisements attract
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people
for buying fake or expired
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products
, making the way for traditional shopping.

In conclusion
, although internet scams,
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shopping
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online
will be
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very
enjoyable and satisfying
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because
it
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allows
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people
to hand-pick
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products
from interested quantities and qualities.
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People
should weigh the positives like saving money, home
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shopping
, and
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so
on and the negatives like
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online
fraud
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before
choosing the better
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shopping
option.
Personally
, I believe that benefit in the form of comparing
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products
from
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different
websites outweighs all other disadvantages.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
44Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Chigozie Ogbonna: Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages? v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
415 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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