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Cars have greater negative impact than positive one in our quality life style. How far do you agree with the statement? v.1

Cars have greater negative impact than positive one in our quality life style. How far v. 1
It is thought that utilizing car in our daily life has had some detrimental effect in getting worth while facilities than positive one. However, while i believe that scientific invention, such as car gives us suitable and comfortable life that people are enjoying for ages. To begin with, using the car to travel one place to another are reducing time and preserves people's valuable time and can reach their destination on the dot. In many countries, where public transports are scarce, therefore, commuters have to wait for long hours, while going to office, work, college and university, most of the time, they have to miss their boat. Indeed, the situation becomes worse in having rough weather. However, people possessing a personal car can reach their destination even at midnight easily and comfortably, which gives them security and privacy as well as hale and hearty. Many countries, people like Bangladesh, for example, fall victim, when travel public transports for their personal purpose, many times lose their valuable items for snatcher to snatching. After all, they have to suffer from traffic congestion on roads and cannot reach their desirable place at the right time. On the other hand, having car has some negative impact in belonging life. Cars create traffic congestion, moreover, which deadlock situations hang the roads as well as busy streets for hours. In other words, if a large population of people wants to use private cars, as a result, roads cannot accommodate all those cars. In Dhaka, for instance, many passengers have to wait inside buses for hours, while going to their respective destination because of intolerable traffic jam which is mainly created by cars. Cars emit, furthermore, black smoke and pollute environment, which reasons, people suffer from many diseases, including cancer, heart disease, respiratory problem, though, they are not responsible for this. In conclusion, although, cars are not free from demerits. It does not mean that the invention of the car has been a curse, Rather the benefit of cars are greatly overweigh its demerits.
It is
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thought
that utilizing
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car
in our daily life has had
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some
detrimental effect in getting
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worth while
facilities than
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positive
one.
However
, while
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i
believe that scientific invention, such as
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car
gives us suitable and comfortable life that
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people
are enjoying for ages.

To
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begin
with, using the
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car
to travel one place to another are reducing
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time
and preserves
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people
's valuable
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time
and can reach their destination on the dot. In
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many
countries, where public transports are scarce,
therefore
, commuters
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have to
wait for long hours, while going to office, work, college and university, most of the
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time
, they
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have to
miss their boat.
Indeed
, the situation becomes worse in having rough weather.
However
,
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people
possessing a personal
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car
can reach their destination even at midnight
easily
and
comfortably
, which gives them security and privacy
as well
as hale and hearty.
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Many
countries,
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people
like Bangladesh,
for example
, fall victim, when travel public transports for their personal purpose,
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many
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times
lose their valuable items for snatcher to snatching.
After all
, they
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have to
suffer from traffic congestion on roads and cannot reach their desirable place at the right time.

On the other hand
, having
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car
has
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some
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negative
impact in belonging life.
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Cars
create traffic congestion,
moreover
, which deadlock situations hang the roads
as well
as busy streets for hours.
In other words
, if a large population of
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people
wants to
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use
private
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cars
,
as a result
, roads cannot accommodate all those
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cars
. In Dhaka,
for instance
,
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many
passengers
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have to
wait inside buses for hours, while going to their respective destination
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because
of intolerable traffic jam which is
mainly
created by
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cars
.
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Cars
emit,
furthermore
, black smoke and pollute environment, which reasons,
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people
suffer from
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many
diseases, including cancer, heart disease, respiratory problem, though, they are not responsible for this.

In conclusion
, although,
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cars
are not free from demerits. It does not mean that the invention of the
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car
has been a curse,
Rather
the benefit of
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cars
are
greatly
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overweigh
its demerits.
22Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Cars have greater negative impact than positive one in our quality life style. How far v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
337 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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