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Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past 30 years in the world that many cities now are "one big traffic jam". Do you think that this statement is true? What measure can government take to address this problem? v.1

Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past 30 years in the world that many cities now are "one big traffic jam". Do you think that this statement is true? What measure can government take to address this problem? v. 1
Nowadays, more and more people are in desire of buying car. However, this trend has brought some problems like traffic jam and it is inevitable to tackle this issue. In this essay I will look at the reasons why car ownership is so popular and propose some solutions for it. First and foremost, public transport in many countries, especially in developed, is very expensive and as a consequence people decide to buy car instead of using buses or trains. In Norway, for example, people often have to spend 10 percent of their salary on buses in order to commute to work. The solution is for the government to reduce the ticket prices of public transport. As buses and trains are able to take much more people than cars, they would significantly reduce traffic problems. Another problem is that most people consider cars as the most convenient way to get from A to B. This is because driving cars does not need as much effort as travelling on foot. As a result, many people go to even small distances like a shopping centers and restaurant by car. These places are often swarming with people and are the main cause of the traffic congestion in city centers. In my country, it is common to see vehicles on the road that get stuck in traffic, but are full of clothes and gifts. The way forward might be to put ban on entering these places by any means of transport, except for bicycle. This will also aid to reduce air and noise pollution and enable people to lead a healthy life. To sum up, cars have some advantages over other means of transport. Travelling by car is cheaper than buses or trains and it easy to travel by car than on foot. My view is that the main responsibility for solving this problem lies with government.
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traffic
jam and it is inevitable to tackle this issue. In this essay I will look at the reasons why
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car
ownership is
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car
instead
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government
to
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the ticket prices of public
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. As buses and trains are able to take much more
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than
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, they would
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problems.

Another problem is that most
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consider
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from A to B. This is
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does not need as much effort as travelling on foot.
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,
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go to even
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distances like a shopping centers and restaurant by
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. These places are
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often
swarming with
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people
and are the main cause of the
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congestion in city centers. In my country, it is common to
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vehicles on the road that
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,
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are full of clothes and gifts. The way forward might be to put ban on entering these places by any means of
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,
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also
aid to
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reduce
air and noise pollution and enable
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people
to lead a healthy life.

To sum up,
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cars
have
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some
advantages over other means of
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transport
. Travelling by
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car
is cheaper than buses or trains and
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easy to travel by
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car
than on foot. My view is that the main responsibility for solving this problem lies with
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government
.
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26Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past 30 years in the world that many cities now are "one big traffic jam". Do you think that this statement is true? What measure can government take to address this problem? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
312 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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