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Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past 30 years in the world that many cities now are "one big traffic jam". Do you think that this statement is true? What measure can government take to address this problem? (rewrite1) v.2

Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past 30 years in the world that many cities now are "one big traffic jam". Do you think that this statement is true? What measure can government take to address this problem? (rewrite1) v. 2
Some environmentalists have a believe that the rising temperature of our climate is a threatening situation for all of us. In this essay we will highlight that what are the main causes for it and what measures could be taken in order to lessen it. Firstly, the ozone depletion and the problems related to it will be discussed. Secondly, the plantations of trees and the plan of how to make our earth a better place to live will be highlighted. We have made the world with emission of green gases by automobiles into a planet full of pollution. With the increasing use of vehicles more gases will produce, more air will be polluted and this will lead to increase the smog effect that we are facing in Lahore these days and according to World statistics it is the second polluted city in the world. Moreover, the smoke produced by internal combustion engines, electrical appliances, chimneys of restaurants and homes. We themselves responsible for this major cause of rising earth temperatures for not taking care of our environment, not focusing on things that has a positive impact on society, trend towards building towers rather than on the plantation and the way we are making our planet worthless place by throwing everything on public places will surely lead to high global temperature. On the other hand, we have to play our roles to make a world a better place. For this, we all have to plant more and more trees for example, Imran khan President of Pakistan has started a drive to plant 10 million trees to reduce the increasing impact of global warming. Government has to put emphasis on public transport so that people should travel on them and reduce the use of cars. A strong check should be done to check factories SOPS and whether they are working on it or not. People should make their homes and surroundings clean and authorities should put a strong fine on throwing anything on streets, parks and public places. To conclude, in my opinion, we are the one that is truly responsible for globally increasing the temperature of our world. Now need of the hour is this we have to put more efforts to make this earth worth to live again because if we don't do anything now than it will surely bring a lot of damage not to ourselves only but to our planet also.
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Some
environmentalists have a
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believe
that the rising temperature of our climate is a threatening situation for all of us. In this essay we will highlight that what are the main causes for it and what measures could
be taken
in order to lessen it.
Firstly
, the ozone depletion and the problems related to it will
be discussed
.
Secondly
, the plantations of trees and the plan of how to
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make
our earth a better
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place
to
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live
will
be highlighted
.

We have made the
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world
with emission of green gases by automobiles into a planet full of pollution. With the increasing
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of vehicles more gases will produce, more air will
be polluted
and this will lead to increase the smog effect that we are facing in Lahore these days and according to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
World
statistics it is the second polluted city in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
world
.
Moreover
, the smoke produced by internal combustion engines, electrical appliances, chimneys of restaurants and homes. We themselves responsible for this major cause of rising earth temperatures for not taking care of our environment, not focusing on things that has a
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positive
impact on society, trend towards building towers
rather
than on the plantation and the way we are making our planet worthless
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place
by throwing everything on public
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places
will
surely
lead to high global temperature.

On the other hand
, we
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have to
play our roles to
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make
a
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world
a better
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place
. For this, we all
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have to
plant more and more trees
for example
,
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Imran
khan President of Pakistan has
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started
a drive to plant 10 million trees to
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reduce
the increasing impact of global warming.
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Government
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has to
put emphasis on public transport
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so
that
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people
should travel on them and
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reduce
the
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use
of cars. A strong
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check
should
be done
to
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check
factories SOPS and whether they are working on it or not.
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People
should
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make
their homes and surroundings clean and authorities should put a strong fine on throwing anything on streets, parks and public places.

To conclude
, in my opinion, we are the one
that is
truly
responsible for globally increasing the temperature of our
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world
.
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Now
need of the hour is this we
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have to
put more efforts to
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make
this earth worth to
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live
again
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because
if we don't do anything
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now
than it will
surely
bring
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a lot of
damage not to ourselves
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only
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but
to our planet
also
.
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IELTS essay Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past 30 years in the world that many cities now are "one big traffic jam". Do you think that this statement is true? What measure can government take to address this problem? (rewrite1) v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
403 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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