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Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages? v.5

a natural result of technology, globalization and innovation that we are living nowadays, it is clear that this develop will contain the shopping also. Crystal clear that there is a revolution of shopping, we can notice that in our daily lives so today it is hard to find someone who didn't try to buy through the internet. Books, flight tickets, electronics, clother and groceries too are available online, using your mobile phone or laptop you can buy anything which will be delivered to your home, while sitting watching TV, forsure that is outstanding process to buy without going to market or driving your car and wasting your time, in contrast, you will charge for delivery and that may cost you extra money, not only that but it will make people lazy more because they were moving to get their needs from markets but now it is not going that way. Last week I decided to buy a pair of shoes online, so I contacted the online store and select my shoes colour and the size then the seller told me that the shoes will be delivered on Monday at 5 pm. Monday at 7 pm he came and apologized for being late because of the heavy traffic, then I started to check my footware, although I realized that the colour was not the same which appeared on the online page, I paid and thanked him. At the end, it is clear that everything has its advantages and disadvantages and you have to deal with it to satisfy yourself.

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 natural result of technology, globalization and innovation that we are living nowadays, it is This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :apparent
clear
 that The verb ‘develop’ is plural. Did you mean: “this develops”? Did you use a verb instead of a noun?this develops
this develop
 will contain the shopping also
.

Crystal This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :apparent
clear
 that there is a revolution of shopping, we can notice that in our daily This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :resides
lives
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so
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :this day and agenowadays
today
 it is This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :arduous
hard
 to find someone who didn't try to You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpurchasebargainacquisitioninvestment
buy
 through the internet.

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clother
 and groceries too are available You use this word too often, consider replacing it withwirednetworked
online
, using your mobile phone or laptop you can You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpurchasebargainacquisitioninvestment
buy
 anything which will be delivered
 to your home, while sitting watching TV, Possible spelling mistake found.for sure
forsure
that is
 outstanding process to You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpurchasebargainacquisitioninvestment
buy
 without going to market or driving your car and wasting your time, in contrast
, you will charge for delivery and that may cost you extra money, not This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exclusively
only
 that This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 it will This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :createconstructmanufactureproduce
make
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 lazy more This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 they were moving to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquire
get
 their needs from markets This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :nowadays
now
 it is not going that way.

Last week I decided to You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpurchasebargainacquisitioninvestment
buy
 a pair of shoes You use this word too often, consider replacing it withwirednetworked
online
, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
 I contacted the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withwirednetworked
online
 store and select my shoes Possible spelling mistake. ‘colour’ is British English.color
colour
 and the size then the seller This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :informed
told
 me that the shoes will be delivered
 on Monday at 5 pm.

Monday at 7 pm he came and apologized for being late This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 of the heavy traffic, then I This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :initiated
started
 to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :monitor
check
 my Possible spelling mistake found.footwearfoot warefootway
footware
, although I realized that the Possible spelling mistake. ‘colour’ is British English.color
colour
 was not the same which appeared on the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withwirednetworked
online
 page, I paid and thanked him.

At the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :expiration
end
, it is This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :apparent
clear
 that everything has its advantages and Use a comma before ‘and’ if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).disadvantages, and
disadvantages and
 you This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:ought to
have to
 deal with it to satisfy yourself. 