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Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.30

Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages? v. 30
In recent years, there has been a growing trend that people tend to buy things on the Internet. This present both pros and cos, however, in my opinion, its benefits are much more significant than the drawbacks. On the one hand, shopping online brings consumers some disadvantages. Initially, since people are unable to touch or to see the products they want to buy in reality, it is always hard for them to examine the quality of these products. As a result, they might purchase the items with poor quality. On the other hand, I am of opinion that shopping online brings people a number of benefits. First, shopping online allows consumers to browse for products and checking prices between these online shops. In this way, people can make a better decision to buy what they like after taking prices, sizes and models into consideration. From my experience, I used to buy an elegant dress at virtual shop, which was cheaper compared to some shops near my houses. Second, buying things on the Internet helps people save a great deal of time. That is to say, since people nowadays are often so caught up with work and study, shopping online is a wise choice which doesn't require them to go to the stores with a click of the mouse, they can buy the things they need and the shippers will deliver their products to customers as soon as possible. Third, since there is a high demand of buying things online, many people can realize their dream of starting up their own business and achieve success in the long run. This can be seen as a positive trend because it creates good job opportunities for people and thereby help people to improve their income and well-being. In conclusion, although buying things on the Internet exerts some adverse aspects, the advantages can justify these.
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tend to
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things on the Internet. This present both pros and cos,
however
, in my opinion, its benefits are much more significant than the drawbacks.

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shopping
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online
brings consumers
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some
disadvantages.
Initially
, since
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people
are unable to touch or to
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see
the
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products
they want to
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buy
in reality, it is always
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hard
for them to examine the quality of these
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products
.
As a result
, they might
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purchase
the items with poor quality.

On the other hand
, I am of opinion that
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shopping
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online
brings
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people
a number of benefits.
First
,
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shopping
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online
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allows
consumers to browse for
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products
and checking prices between these
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online
shops. In this way,
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people
can
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make
a better decision to
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buy
what they like after taking prices, sizes and models into consideration. From my experience, I
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used
to
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buy
an elegant dress at virtual shop, which was cheaper compared to
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some
shops near my
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houses
.

Second, buying things on the Internet
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helps
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people
save a great deal of time.
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to say, since
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people
nowadays are
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often
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so
caught up with work and study,
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shopping
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online
is a wise choice which doesn't require them to go to the stores with a click of the mouse, they can
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buy
the things they need and the shippers will deliver their
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products
to customers as
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soon
as possible.

Third, since there is a high demand of buying things
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online
,
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many
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people
can realize their dream of starting up their
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own
business and achieve success in the long run. This can be
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seen
as a
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positive
trend
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because
it creates
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good
job opportunities for
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people
and thereby
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help
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people
to
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improve
their income and well-being.

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, although buying things on the Internet exerts
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some
adverse aspects, the advantages can justify these.
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IELTS essay Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages? v. 30

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
311 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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