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Buying fashionable clothies is wasteful because people do not need new clothes all the time Clothing should be bought and used more wisely Do you agree v.2

Buying fashionable clothies is wasteful because people do not need new clothes all the time Clothing should be bought and used more wisely Do you agree v. 2
A world famous trader, Warren Buffet, says that " Do not buy thing you don' t need”. It seems that this statement is true for fashionable clothes too. They usually look very attractive & beautiful but all good looking things come at a cost. Off course, branded fashionable clothes are expensive because there is a brand value or cost attached to it. For example: Gucci, Armani, UCB, Ferrari and many more would sell a jacket for 10, 000 Rupees which one could buy for 2000 Rupees from a not so known brand. Moreover, the reality is that most of the brands (including the not so known ones) use the same dress material with different styles and are stitched in same factories. Instead of falling for them people should look out for cheaper options that are easily available. Most of us generally want to make a fashion statement whenever we step out of our house. It has been scientifically proven that people judge you by what you wear and not by who you actually are. That is the sad truth and probably that is why everybody wants to look their best. In this race, they spend too much moolah on expensive branded clothing and accessories. Rather, they should spend their money wisely and buy cheaper options. Cheaper clothing are mostly available in flee markets. Off course, one has to search from a big pile of clothes at many outlets but it is definitely worth the effort. It is more pocket friendly so one can buy twice or thrice as much in the same amount. Also, people are in a habit of discarding used clothes pretty quickly as nowadays stores change their collection every other month. Instead, they should donate their clothes to someone in need. This they would achieve maximum utilization of their clothes, do some social work and add good karma as well. People can also make use of used clothing to make things for daily use. For example: Pockets of jeans and shirts can be used to make holders for mobile phones. A T-Shirt in a worn out condition can be used as a use and throw mop. Majorly, people buy clothes they actually do not need. Brick and mortar shops as well as eCommerce companies attract customers by giving attractive discounts. For example: Bug 2 get 1 free. So, actually one would have stepped in to a shop to buy only 1 garment but ends up buying 3. In my humble opinion, people should ask themselves a question before going for shopping clothes. Whether they actually need new clothes or not? I am sure they would definitely get a wise answer.
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famous
trader, Warren Buffet, says that
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; Do not
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buy
thing you
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don&
#039; t
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need”
. It seems that this statement is true for fashionable
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clothes
too. They
usually
look
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very
attractive
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&amp
;
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beautiful
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but
all
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good looking
things
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come
at a cost. Off course, branded fashionable
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clothes
are expensive
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because
there is a brand value or cost attached to it.
For example
: Gucci, Armani, UCB, Ferrari and
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many
more would sell a jacket for 10, 000 Rupees which one could
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buy
for 2000 Rupees from a not
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so
known brand.
Moreover
, the reality is that most of the brands (including the not
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so
known ones)
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use
the same dress material with
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different
styles and
are stitched
in same factories.
Instead
of falling for them
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people
should look out for cheaper options that are
easily
available.

Most of us
generally
want to
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make
a fashion statement whenever we step out of our
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house
. It has been
scientifically
proven that
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people
judge you by what you wear and not by
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who
you actually are.
That is
the sad truth and
probably
that is
why everybody wants to look their best. In this race, they spend too much
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moolah
on expensive branded clothing and accessories.
Rather
, they should spend their money
wisely
and
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buy
cheaper options. Cheaper clothing are
mostly
available in
Did you mean "flea markets" (= street market)?
flee markets
. Off course, one
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has to
search from a
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big
pile of
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clothes
at
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many
outlets
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but
it is definitely worth the effort. It is more pocket friendly
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so
one can
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buy
twice or thrice as much in the same amount.

Also
,
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people
are in a habit of discarding
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used
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clothes
pretty
quickly
as nowadays stores
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change
their collection every other month.
Instead
, they should donate their
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clothes
to someone in
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need
. This they would achieve maximum utilization of their
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clothes
, do
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some
social work and
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add
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good
karma
as well
.
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People
can
also
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make
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use
of
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used
clothing to
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make
things for daily
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use
.
For example
: Pockets of jeans and shirts can be
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used
to
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make
holders for mobile phones. A T-Shirt in a worn out condition can be
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used
as a
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use
and throw mop.

Majorly
,
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people
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buy
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clothes
they actually do not
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need
. Brick and mortar shops
as well
as
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eCommerce
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companies
attract customers by giving attractive discounts.
For example
: Bug 2
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get
1 free.
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So
, actually one would have stepped in to a shop to
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buy
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only
1 garment
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but
ends up buying 3.

In my humble opinion,
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people
should ask themselves a question
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before
going for shopping
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clothes
. Whether they actually
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need
new
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clothes
or not? I am sure they would definitely
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get
a wise answer.
15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
29Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS essay Buying fashionable clothies is wasteful because people do not need new clothes all the time Clothing should be bought and used more wisely Do you agree v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
443 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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