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Briefly summarize the problem the speakers are discussing. Then state which of the two solutions from the conversation you would recommend. Explain the reasons for your recommend. v.7

Briefly summarize the problem the speakers are discussing. Then state which of the two solutions from the conversation you would recommend. Explain the reasons for your recommend. v. 7
Owing to the comfortable journey a car provides, more and more people are opting to use it for their daily transportation. However, this luxury has given rise to the issues such as adverse effects on the environment and unbearable traffic congestion, which this essay will discuss in detail. Also, I firmly believe that we should motivate people to reduce the usage of a car as much as possible to get above problems under control. One major complication that occurs due to the vast number of four-wheelers on the road is, it's terrible impacts on the environment. Cars operates on fossil fuel, which upon burning emits carbon dioxide and other toxic gasses in the air. This aggravates the greenhouse impacts such as increased temperature, acid rains, and disturbed rain cycle, adding to the ever-burning issue that is global warming. Not only air contamination, cars are major contributors of sound pollution as well. Therefore, deterring people from using it more frequently is advisable to reverse the effects. For example, Recently, Japan banned the public from using cars for 15 days in order to clear up the atmosphere and its outcome was incredible. Other difficultly people face in their day to day life due to increasing automobiles in transit is heinous traffic congestions. Most metropolitans spend the majority of their day being in those red-light queues waiting for it to turn green, which is nothing but a sheer waste of their precious time and energy. On the other hand, if these jams can be avoided, then people can utilize that time and energy in some productive way. All in all, in conclusion, I would say that problems arising due to the use of personal cars far outweighs benefits and hence people should be more cautious with their utilization.
Owing to the comfortable journey a
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car
provides, more and more
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people
are opting to
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use
it for their daily transportation.
However
, this luxury has
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given
rise to the issues such as adverse effects on the environment and unbearable traffic congestion, which this essay will discuss in detail.
Also
, I
firmly
believe that we should motivate
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people
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
the usage of a
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car
as much as possible to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
above problems under control.

One major complication that occurs due to the vast number of
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four-wheelers
on the road is,
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it's terrible impacts
on the environment.
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Cars operates
on fossil fuel, which upon burning emits carbon dioxide and other toxic gasses in the air. This aggravates the greenhouse impacts such as increased temperature, acid rains, and disturbed rain cycle, adding to the ever-burning issue
that is
global warming. Not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
air contamination,
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cars
are major contributors of sound pollution
as well
.
Therefore
, deterring
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people
from using it more
frequently
is advisable to reverse the effects.
For example
, Recently, Japan banned the public from using
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cars
for 15 days in order to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
clear
up the atmosphere and its outcome was incredible.

Other
difficultly
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people
face in their
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day to day
life due to increasing automobiles in transit is heinous traffic congestions. Most metropolitans spend the majority of their day being in those red-light queues waiting for it to turn green, which is nothing
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but
a sheer waste of their precious time and energy.
On the other hand
, if these jams can
be avoided
, then
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people
can utilize that time and energy in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
productive way.

All in all,
in conclusion
, I would say that problems arising due to the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of personal
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cars
far outweighs benefits and
hence
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people
should be more cautious with their utilization.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Briefly summarize the problem the speakers are discussing. Then state which of the two solutions from the conversation you would recommend. Explain the reasons for your recommend. v. 7

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
295 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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