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Billions of dollars are spent on space research This is a waste of money More money must be spent on improving the problems of people on Earth To what extent do you agree or disagree v.2

Billions of dollars are spent on space research This is a waste of money More money must be spent on improving the problems of people on Earth v. 2
Money investment on space research seems to be unnecessary as long as money is not used for problem-fixing on our planet. In my opinion, we should firstly concentrate on preservation of Earth and it' s inhabitants and secondly to spend money on space exploration. We must acknowledge that space is an endless place covered with mystery. Our curiosity to explore it' s darkest corners and celestial bodies is growing every day. Furthermore, investing funds for this purpose can be profitable regarding new discoveries of a new possible habitable planet for humans which we evidentally need in terms of still-increasing problems on Earth which we cannot take care of. In addition, these findings could solve one of the most frequently asked question - Are we here alone? However, we should take care of our Green planet on the first place. Even though we fully use all of the potential of Earth' s resources, the quality of living seems to be quite poor. For instance, deteriorating the quality of air we breath concerning air pollution, littering all of the natural beauties and sources and last but not least, life quality of lower classes, speaking of homeless people. Moreover, lots of children in orphanages and children' s home cannot taste anything about life as we cannot give them a real home or more importantly, true love. I believe that the quality of living on our Mother Earth has to be improved on the first place and therefore should be more money invested rather on making a better place to live than on uncertain success of space research and discoveries.
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investment on
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research seems to be unnecessary as long as
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money
is not
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for problem-fixing on our planet. In my opinion, we should
firstly
concentrate on preservation of
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Earth
and
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#039; s inhabitants and
secondly
to spend
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money
on
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space
exploration.

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must
acknowledge that
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space
is an endless
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place
covered with mystery. Our curiosity to explore
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it&
#039; s darkest corners and celestial bodies is growing every day.
Furthermore
, investing funds for this purpose can be profitable regarding new discoveries of a new possible habitable planet for humans which we
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evidentally
need in terms of
still
-increasing problems on
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Earth
which we cannot take care of.
In addition
, these findings could solve one of the most
frequently
asked question
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Are we here alone?

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, we should take care of our Green planet on the
first
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place
.
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we
fully
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use
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all of the
potential of
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Earth&
#039; s resources, the
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quality
of living seems to be quite poor.
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, deteriorating the
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quality
of air we
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breath
concerning air pollution, littering
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all of the
natural beauties and sources and last
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but
not least, life
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quality
of lower classes, speaking of homeless
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people
.
Moreover
, lots of children in orphanages and
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children&
#039; s home cannot taste anything about life as we cannot give them a real home or more
importantly
, true
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love
.

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quality
of living on our Mother
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Earth
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has to
be
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improved
on the
first
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place
and
therefore
should be more
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money
invested
rather
on making a better
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to
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live
than on uncertain success of
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space
research and discoveries.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS essay Billions of dollars are spent on space research This is a waste of money More money must be spent on improving the problems of people on Earth v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
266 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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