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Big salary is much more important than job satisfaction. Do you agree or disagree? v.5

Big salary is much more important than job satisfaction. v. 5
Increasingly, people are faced with the problem of choosing between high salaries and job satisfaction. It is often considered that it is more beneficial to have high-paying work, even if it is a totally unpleasant work for you. This essay will argue why huge salary is much more important than job satisfaction despite some disadvantages. Many people have always been worried about their income. Great salary gives people a sense of confidence that poorly paid job can't guarantee. It has allowed people to get a financial independence from other people. Lots of people consider that money helps to protect their family and provide them a comfortable living. Indeed, a lot of young couples seek to have a well-paid work to secure the baby's future and create comfortable conditions for raising children. These few instances motivate people to have a high paying position to feel yourself safety. Despite the advantages, the idea to enjoy your profession isn't unnecessary, otherwise it will become a chore. People with high post more stressed than others and often suffer from overworking and sometimes they need to have a fun in the process. In China lots of workers suffer from the stress, because they haven't fun at work, what lead to the problems with health. Overall, the idea that enjoys work is not serious isn't true, because the best way to high salary is find a balance between work and satisfaction. This essay argued that people who are against the job satisfaction want more stability and have a motivation to do their best for the family.
Increasingly
,
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high
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salaries
and
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job
satisfaction. It is
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often
considered that it is more beneficial to have high-paying
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work
, even if it is a
totally
unpleasant
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work
for you. This essay will argue why huge
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salary
is much more
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important
than
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job
satisfaction despite
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some
disadvantages.

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Many
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people
have always
been worried
about their income. Great
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salary
gives
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people
a sense of confidence that
poorly
paid
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job
can't guarantee. It has
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allowed
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people
to
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get
a financial independence from other
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people
. Lots of
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people
consider that money
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helps
to protect their family and provide them a comfortable living.
Indeed
,
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a lot of
young couples seek to have a well-paid
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work
to secure the baby's future and create comfortable conditions for raising children. These few instances motivate
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people
to have a
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high
paying position to feel yourself safety.

Despite the advantages, the
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idea
to enjoy your profession isn't unnecessary,
otherwise
it will become a chore.
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People
with
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high
post more
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stressed
than others and
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often
suffer from overworking and
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sometimes
they need to have a fun in the process. In China lots of workers suffer from the
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stress
,
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because
they haven't fun at
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work
, what lead to the problems with health.
Overall
, the
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idea
that enjoys
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work
is not serious isn't true,
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because
the best way to
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high
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salary
is find a balance between
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work
and satisfaction.

This essay argued that
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people
who are against the
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job
satisfaction want more stability and have a motivation to do their best for the family.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay Big salary is much more important than job satisfaction. v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
260 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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